I set myself free


an old page fell out
I unfolded and opened a world filled with you
initials carved on college desk
a bunch of promises that are long overdue

soaked clothes in august rain
lust peeking through white
a meter-less sonnet inked for you
and a cold reaction for a poet's delight

folding it back the woman in me chuckled
the young girl adjusted her hair
knowing too well between strokes
you would have never cared

though I  folded the page back
your fragments remained with me
take all that you left behind - I screamed
let me be free

twenties is a wicked time
you fly and think you can soar
thirties is no less either
these tidbits are hard to ignore

I unfolded the page again
made a paper plane with words out
threw in your direction
from where you once come unannounced

with a flick and some wind
yesterday I embraced the woman in me
with that paper plane flew my remaining hopes
but I set myself free

p.s. - posting a poem after a gap of 3.5 months
image source - here

Comments


  1. How beautiful! I especially loved the fifth stanza comparing the twenties and the thirties.

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  2. This is mesmerizing verse... loved every bit of it, especially the lines "soaked clothes in august rain
    lust peeking through white
    a meter-less sonnet inked for you
    and a cold reaction for a poet's delight"... it has an intense meaning! <3

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  3. Simply fantastic Saru...really wonderful!!!

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  4. its not easy to erase some Memories You know
    Even if You Burn them in the campfire in your heart
    As the Ashes would haunt you again
    The Reminiscences becomes more vivid than in the past

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  5. though I folded the page back
    your fragments remained with me
    take all that you left behind - I screamed
    let me be free
    your words looks like mine every time Saru ji . one can relate easily with your words .

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  6. Wow! Very lovely. It brings mysterious smile on my face. :)

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  7. Beautifully penned, Saru! I especially loved those flashback lines. :)

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  8. Celebrating womanhood! Absolutely beautiful Saru.

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  9. Beautifully penned Saru.. These four lines:
    twenties is a wicked time
    you fly and think you can soar
    thirties is no less either
    these tidbits are hard to ignore

    shows truth of every woman's life :)

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  10. Beautiful. Very well written and so many emotions you have poured out.

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  11. a paper plane, a poet, and freedom....what bliss....!

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  12. Mesmerizingly beautiful Saru, it has touched my soul. Always loved your poems... :)

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  13. Your words are brimming with unbelievable depth, beauty and soul. They send you into a beautiful trance that you don't want to leave. Absolutely loved it.

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    1. That's very kind of you, Raj. Thanks for a lovely compliment.

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  14. It funny how so much can spill out of a little piece of paper. That is just what you should do to memories that bog you down - make a paper plane and fly it into oblivion.

    Nice job, Saru.

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  15. So beautiful and poignant, Saru. May be you should write poems often.

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    1. Arre kitni baar bola hai inhe.

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    2. @Cloud Nine - I will, for sure. Thanks for a beautiful compliment.

      @Ajay - I will keep your words in mind. Thanks!

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  16. One of the best work of yours. Just beautiful :)

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  17. Wow! I got lost in the poem. It's mesmerizing :)

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  18. Lovely words. Yes, Memories dont fade.

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  19. fabulous composition depicting wait which never ended

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  20. what a lovely poem and it beautifully reflects that piquant feeling. loved it :)

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  21. I think everyone must have crossed this bridge at one point in their lives... You have once again beautifully depicted those emotions... Indeed it has set me free :):)

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    1. We all have, but only a few have the courage to admit it.

      Thanks for gracing this blog with your presence. <3

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  22. Lovely! the memories! and loved the idea of setting free!

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    1. Setting yourself free is a better idea. Thanks for reading, Ranjana.

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  23. After a long time i read a lovely poem. Keep it up.

    Thanks for writing.

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  24. Beautifully penned Saru. I read it several times.

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  25. Unsure what to comment. With such ease the poem is written, bravo. I felt as if reading a poem written by a teenager.

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  26. I visited your page for the first time through IndiBlogger. Amazingly written. Although I am still in my 20ies but could still relate it to my life. Amazing.
    I am sure I'll be following you hereafter!! Cheers!!

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    1. Welcome here, Gracy. Thanks for your beautiful comment.

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  27. This is beautiful Saru.. There's so much naive-ness and power in young love.. Its hard to forget. Beautifully written once again..

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