सही न जाए जुदाई...

कल शाम मेरे आँगन से तेरे नाम की ख़ुशबू आई,
सही न जाए अब तो एक पल भी जुदाई !
वो काफ़िर है जो लब से उल्फ़त को करे बयाँ,
ये नियामत तो मेरे हर अंग में है समाई! 

सही न जाए अब तो एक पल भी जुदाई...
शुरू होती है फलक से, फ़ना बस एक झलक में, 
ख़ुदा भी न जाने कब उसने ये इबादत बनाई !
सही न जाए अब तो एक पल भी जुदाई...
तसल्ली दे के दिल को, बहुत दिन काटे है मैंने,
आओ अब कि कदमों की आहट से घूंज उठे शेहनाई!
सही न जाए अब तो एक पल भी जुदाई!



~सरू सिंघल~


Comments

  1. Nice!!! 'shuru hoti hai....ibadat banayi' . My favourite lines :-)

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  2. कभी सोचा हे ?
    जुदाई हो या तन्हाई
    तुमने प्यार की प्याली जो पिलाई
    अब सही जाये ने यह जुदाई
    तुम्हरे प्यार में खुद खीची आयी
    Cheers
    Sush
    Sorry could not translate in hindi]

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    1. Lovely lines. Didn't understand, you couldn't translate what???

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  3. शुरू होती है फलक से, फ़ना बस एक झलक में,
    ख़ुदा भी न जाने कब उसने ये इबादत बनाई !

    Amazing lines those. I can so relate to this poem, separation is always hard. :(

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    1. Thank you Akshay. Yeah, separation is really hard and heart breaking...

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  4. Very nice.....'kadamon kee aahat se goonj uthe shehnai...bahut khoob

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    1. Thank you so much Sir. Your comments are very inspiring.

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  5. Beautifully written... Took me a lot of time reading this poem for im not that good at hindi. I might also have misunderstood some words, I apologies for that

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    1. No problems, I think this poem has some heavy words. Thanks for reading and welcome here:)

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  6. आओ अब कि कदमों की आहट से घूंज उठे शेहनाई
    ये नियामत है !क्या कहे हम! अति सुन्दर शब्द!

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  7. Beautiful emotions penned down in Hindi cum Urdu........
    Moments with the beloved fly, aptly said in-
    शुरू होती है फलक से, फ़ना बस एक झलक में,

    Longing, immense love expressed in these words Saru is lovely. Write more often in Hindi....

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    1. I will try. I post once a month in hindi. Thanks for reading Shaifali. :)

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  8. Amazing vocab in Hindi. IS Niyamat betrayal? I took a lot of time to read this. But the essence is felt!

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    1. Niyamat means 'God's Gift'. Thanks for reading it Jenny. :) :) :)

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  9. No comments on romantic poems :P

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  10. Beautifully written Urdu poem in Hindi script.. Your Urdu is amazing! :)

    Saru, where did you take pictures from ?

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    1. I search for pictures on Google, can't recall which keyword I used to get this one. Sorry...

      And thanks for a lovely comment.

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  11. That was scintillating and so beautiful. I am just amazed by the vocabulary and your phenomenal usage of those words so perfectly.

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    1. Speechless, after reading such a beautiful comment. Thank you Raj...:)

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  12. Sahee na jae juthaee. I think I'm right but translation please......

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    1. You are right. I will try loading the voice blogging next time...:)

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  13. आहट से घूंज उठे शेहनाई wah!!

    beautifully expressed emotions!

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  14. तसल्ली दे के दिल को, बहुत दिन काटे है मैंने,, aise hi hota when you love truley,,you never loose hope..and shayd ek din sach bhi hojaye jo hum chahte hai wo,,

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    1. True...There is always a hope against hope in love. Thanks for a lovely comment Ruchi.:)

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  15. After a break, its nice to enter with such read,
    In spite of not being a critic,highly appreciate,
    Hope you will meet your need..Good luck!

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    1. Thank you Sir for an inspiring comment. Often hindi work is not appreciated.

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  16. Didi....kya hai aapme..a decent hindi poem on the most painful word...."Judai" after Tharki man baavra..

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    1. Thank you Hemant. I am happy that someone has liked it. This is my worst hindi poem if I go by stats...:(

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  17. this is so beautiful saru..

    think it would be rite up ther wid ur best ones..

    u've written it sooo well!! awesum work :)

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    1. No, the stats beg to differ. But thankfully there are people like us who really like it. Thanks a lot for appreciating it.

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  18. Soulful! One of your best works in Hindi. It captured the true essence of Judai :):)

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  19. शुरू होती है फलक से, फ़ना बस एक झलक में,
    ख़ुदा भी न जाने कब उसने ये इबादत बनाई !

    MAASHA-ALLAAH! :O

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  20. I wonder how ppl write so beautifully in Hindi. Absolutely lovely!

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  21. Beautiful as always Saru.. :)

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  22. :) i found it romantic the last couple of lines beautiful

    Bikram's

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  23. beautiful Saru...as always !

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  24. बहुत ही सुन्दर एवं सारगर्भित रचना । मेरे नए पोस्ट "अमृत लाल नागर" पर आपका बेसब्री से इंतजार रहेगा । धन्यवाद ।

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  25. बहुत उम्दा, बहुत खूब !

    "शुरू होती है फलक से, फ़ना बस एक झलक में,
    ख़ुदा भी न जाने कब उसने ये इबादत बनाई !"

    दिल को छू गयीं ये लाइने .

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    1. Thank you so much for appreciating these lines. :)

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  26. Absolutely wonderful poem, Saru!

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  27. I am not the best judge of Hindi. It is soulful and i enjoyed it

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  28. वो काफ़िर है जो लब से उल्फ़त को करे बयाँ,
    ये नियामत तो मेरे हर अंग में है समाई !

    ummdaaa...bahut khoob likha aapane

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    1. Thanks and these are my favorite lines from this poem too. :)

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  29. Superb.. as usual!! ;)

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  30. आओ अब कि कदमों की आहट से घूंज उठे शेहनाई !
    सही न जाए अब तो एक पल भी जुदाई !


    वाह! दिल की गहराइयों को छूते हुए शब्द हैं...

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  31. Nice one. Reading a Hindi poem after 15 years. Last read one back at school. So bit of a struggle to read.

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  32. Lovely, as usual!!

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  33. Lovely, hindi poems are always beautiful and gives that desi effect..!! :) aah such an adorable language!

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    1. It is such an adorable language. Thanks for reading Gayathri.

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  34. मिलने की घड़ी आई,अब सही ना जाये जूदाई

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  35. Beautiful as always Saru......love it

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  36. Hi Saru,

    It was sheer pleasure to go through your words. They are so meaningfully woven. Being a fantastic poet which u are, it will be my great delight to have my poems reviewed by you. Do read them, ofcourse at your leisure.

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    1. Thanks for such a lovely comment Anupam and I would love to read your work.:)

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  37. It's amazing how whenever you write about love each time, you make it sound fresh and novel :-)

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    1. You just made my day. One of the best comments I have received till date...:)

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  38. Wah Khoob ! Bahut sundar pharmaish.

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  39. i loved this line in your poetry शुरू होती है फलक से, फ़ना बस एक झलक में,

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  40. very beautifully written ---

    वो काफ़िर है जो लब से उल्फ़त को करे बयाँ,
    fabulous lines

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  41. Lovely and beautiful poem...got few hiccups while reading 3rd and 4th line ......Keep rocking Saru:)

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    1. I know some words are lil offbeat in this one. Thanks for reading dear:)

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  42. maza aa gya..
    Beautifully written Saru... I read it almost thrice :P

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  43. Beautiful lines, soulful and heart touching.. wow, Saru :)

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  44. beautiful .. liked the "words" :)

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  45. Very romantic poem Saru. "wo kaafir hai jo lab se ulfat ko karein bayaan" loved it.

    Aapke alfaaz me ek ummeed hai.

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  46. To be honest some of the words were beyond me :) but even then the depth of the poem is simply awesome..lovely play of words stitched together with amazing finesse...hope to see much more of these from you :)

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    1. Some words are offbeat Prayukth. Thanks for appreciating the poem and for an encouraging comment. :)

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  47. आओ अब कि कदमों की आहट से घूंज उठे शेहनाई !
    सही न जाए अब तो एक पल भी जुदाई !

    ......waah bahut khoob saru lovely post mujhe bahut pasand aayi . hardik badhai . labjo ke alfaj ,......waah

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    1. Thank you so much Shashi. I think many liked this line...:)

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  48. beautiful as always...please visit the link theres a small surprise for u http://alkanarula.blogspot.in/2012/04/awesome-blogger-award-first-of-thank.html#links

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  49. beautiful poem
    congrats 100th comment

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  50. सुन्दर कविता दोस्त बधाई |

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  51. कदमों की आहट से घूंज उठे शेहनाई... very intense, very beautiful!

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  52. Wow,... yetanother beauty! :) Loved it!

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  53. Awesome! I am reading hindi poems after a long time and the usage of excellent poetic words have totally awakened my senses :) Great Job!

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  54. शुरू होती है फलक से, फ़ना बस एक झलक में,
    ख़ुदा भी न जाने कब उसने ये इबादत बनाई !
    Excellent lines....

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  55. Excellent !!!!

    Happy Blogging !!!

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  56. nice creation.

    may be u like below link also
    from :- http://panktee.blogspot.in/

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  57. Wah...wah. Woh kafir hai jo labsa se ulfat ko kare bayaan- beautiful lines.

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  58. शुरू होती है फलक से, फ़ना बस एक झलक में,
    ख़ुदा भी न जाने कब उसने ये इबादत बनाई !
    वाह ! क्या गज़ब की पंक्तियाँ लिखी हैं ! लगता ही नहीं कि ये पंक्तियाँ ज्यादातर अंग्रेजी में लिखने वाली किसी कवियत्री ने लिखी हैं ! बहुत सुन्दर सारू जी

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  59. Urdu+Hindi = A SUPER COMBO-PACK !

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