उसके हाथों में हो जब मेरा हाथ
तो लम्हा लम्हा सरके, न गुजरे ये रात
न बोले वो, न मैं बोली
जैसे इक लम्बी गुफ्तगु हो ली
लगा कोई है सदियों से साथ
उसके हाथों में था जब मेरा हाथ
मैंने पी खूब जो पिलाई उसने
मेरी रूह भी समाई उसमें
निग़ाहों में थी एक अनकही बात
उसके हाथों में था जब मेरा हाथ
अब ज़िंदा कहाँ, दफन है
ये काली रातें जैसे कफ़न हैं
ज़ल्द हो मेरी उनसे एक मुलाक़ात
और लम्हा लम्हा सरके, न गुजरे ये रात
उसके हाथों में हो जब मेरा हाथ
तो लम्हा लम्हा सरके, न गुजरे ये रात
P. S - I wrote this poem in 12th Standard.
मैंने पी खूब जो पिलाई उसने
ReplyDeleteमेरी रूह भी समाई उसमें
निग़ाहों में थी एक अनकही बात
उसके हाथों में था जब मेरा हाथ …. वाह.…क्या बात
Shukriya Aparna :)
DeleteAwesomely awesome Saru....I always wonder where u get ideas from :)
ReplyDeleteOr I've been too busy to wander into streets of such thoughts ;)
When I wonder on streets, I look for ideas :D I find it there... :)
DeleteOn a serious note, thanks for a heart warming comment, Hemant. You just made my day.
एक पूरा शब्दचित्र खींच दिया है
ReplyDeleteकितनी सहज ढंग से लिखी कविता हैं.....
ReplyDeleteबहुत सुन्दर भाव..
Bahut bahut shukriya Sanjay ji :)
DeleteOh.. What a wonder! Its so beautiful! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Preeti :)
Deletedeliciously romantic!!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Ankita :)
Deletevery romantic :)
ReplyDeleteThanks a ton, Madhusudan :)
DeleteYou enchant the reader with your charming poetry !
ReplyDeleteHumbled, thank you Sir!
Deleteजज्बात से भरी रचना .
ReplyDeleteShukriya.
Deleteenchanting and beautiful. Such warmth!
ReplyDeleteThanks RH!
DeleteLovely, as always.
ReplyDeleteThanks Alka :)
DeleteIt is amazing how nicely a poet/ess play with emotions as well as words! I just wonder and keep my mouth open! Very well written Saru!
ReplyDeleteRegards,
Sindhu
Tantu
The Arts & Me
Thank you for a lovely comment, Sindhu :)
Deletekya baat, kya baat! :D
ReplyDeleteBlasphemous Aesthete
Hehehehe...
DeleteThis surely should be made into a song..it is beautiful!
ReplyDeleteAwww... Thanks Pooja!
Deleteअत्यन्त सुन्दर, गहरी और आत्मीय अभिव्यक्ति।
ReplyDeleteShukriya Praveen ji.
Deletebahut khoobsoorat
ReplyDeleteThis is so beautiful Saru.... I take so much time to read Hindi but this one from you was totally worth the effort...
ReplyDeleteThanks for making the effort, Naba. Glad you liked it.
Deleteजब साथ हो उनका तो समय हकान रहता अहि सोचने का की लम्हा गुज़र रहा है या रात ...
ReplyDeleteWah, Wah!!!
DeleteBeautiful Saru...This is what I love here... your poems! Something so touching and nostalgic! Loved it! :)
ReplyDeleteAh, you just made my day Mi!
DeleteAlways love to hear from you :)
मैंने पी खूब जो पिलाई उसने
ReplyDeleteमेरी रूह भी समाई उसमें
निग़ाहों में थी एक अनकही बात
उसके हाथों में था जब मेरा हाथ
.. just too gud !
Shukriya, shukriya :)
DeleteMy reply-
ReplyDeleteJo kar de iss dil ke har goonche ko roshan
Kuch aisa hi hai tera saath
www.numerounity.com
Bahut Khoobsurat!
Deleteअरे वाह! अति सुन्दर.
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
DeleteLonging and reminiscence, we are on the same page this week :).
ReplyDeleteOne of the things I admire the most in your poetry, and I lack dearly, is the ability to be terse and yet effective. It retains the emotion and the crispness of expression.
Your best works are always Hindi poems and this is certainly one of them :)
Oh, I don't like my work for the very same reason. I want to write long sentences to create an impact. Glad you like the poem. And this poem I wrote in 12th standard during board exams. :)
DeleteReally! That long ago...it makes it so much more beautiful...coz now I read it from a teenager's point of view...and the longing changes from lost love to new love :)
DeleteYou should mention that 12th class thing upfront! :)
Will add a post script. Wondering, age can change our perception for art. :) Amazing, isn't it?
DeleteAge should add perspective or else we are in trouble! :)
DeleteTrue :)
DeleteOMG! You were so romantic at that early age.
ReplyDeleteIt's Beautiful! :)
Hehehehe... Romantic, not at all. I just loved writing even then. :)
DeleteThanks for liking it, Gayatri.
Tajmahal chai ki yaad dila di...mizaaz shayarana ker diye apne.
ReplyDeleteWah! I was not aware that you knew hindi. :)
DeleteWow, you could write like this back then. And kya romantic thoughts. I am sure you showed all of them to Alok :). Lovely!
ReplyDeleteYeah, he read it when I published. Glad you liked it, Rachna. :)
Deleteवाह वाह! पढ़ कर दिल Romantic हो गया। :D
ReplyDeleteHehehehe....
Deleteus raat ki baat aaj bhi goonj raha hai :)
ReplyDeleteरात की स्याही में भी सुंदर सपने तुमने देखे!ये उमर भी तो ऐसी होती है:)
ReplyDeleteSahi kaha aapne :)
Deletetoo good !
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteVery Romantic...Aur 12th mein hi likhte hai log aksar, dil se dil ki baat :) liked it.
ReplyDeleteHahaha... That is so true!
DeleteLovely verse, Saru! glad to see you didn't lose your base with poetry!
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
Delete"अब ज़िंदा कहाँ, दफन है
ReplyDeleteये काली रातें ......i wrote somewhere " shivers my heart, like drops of rain water on the lotus leaf, scintillating, vibrating, yet the reciting chyme vibrates...
I do not know why tears came but failed to roll. Thank you for the wonderful feelings that I felt after reading your poetry again and again.
Such a beautiful line. Words have this power of evoking unexplained emotions in us. Glad you like it, Sir. :)
DeleteBeautiful sonnet! Ab zinda kahan dafan hain...applause. Thanks for a lovely read.
ReplyDeleteGlad Nilanjana! :)
Deletesuperb.
ReplyDeleteThanks!
Deletelovely!!
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
DeleteI will go by Aparna!
ReplyDelete:)
Deleteअब ज़िंदा कहाँ, दफन है
ReplyDeleteये काली रातें जैसे कफ़न हैं
ज़ल्द हो मेरी उनसे एक मुलाक़ात
और लम्हा लम्हा सरके, न गुजरे ये रात
उसके हाथों में हो जब मेरा हाथ
तो लम्हा लम्हा सरके, न गुजरे ये रात
अत्यन्त सुन्दर, गहरी और आत्मीय अभिव्यक्ति सारू जी ! काव्य प्रतिभा निश्चित रूप से प्रशंसनीय है , और होगी भी , आप बचपन से लिखती आ रही हैं !
Thanks for a lovely comment, Yogi ji.
DeleteLovable poetry. Remembered some old precious moment of my life.
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