Barren Life


I could be wrong,
As I’ve always been.
Treading the less traveled path,
I've some unanswered questions within.
Some black and white memories
Some wounded old dreams.
Feels like,
Dragging this body for centuries.
Tired of getting up after every crumple,
I laugh with my eyes bleeding,
Can I get some rest, some rest on your shoulder?
I could be alone,
As I’ve always been.

*This poem was published in Rousing Cadence.
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Comments

  1. What a sad and lovely poem!

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  2. beautifully put expressions.. and congrats for getting it published :)

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  3. beautiful poem saru...amit jee sent me that lovely book....the whole collection is marvelous....

    anu

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  4. I love this poem Saru...something in this resonates deeply...

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  5. Profound, beautiful and heart warming! As always! :)

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  6. Hmmmmm being alone huh.....speechless...loved it....you are a wonderful expressionist

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  7. you always portray life's reality into words..thats why your blog title is most apt..god bless u saru.

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  8. Hi saru,

    Lovely, a poignant description of a lonely soul...moving and eerily stirring

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  9. "Black and white memories"- they caught my attention...actually, i use such posts as a tutorial for myself...and ur poem always opens new world of possibilities before me...I always want to learn

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  10. I almost felt a need for a shoulder to lean on as I read the poem.. touching words Saru

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  11. Lovely ^_^
    Only love has the utmost power to strengthen someone shattered.
    Beautiful poem. :)

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  12. Resonating my thoughts and feelings in those words... Awesome poem..!!

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  13. I laugh with my eyes bleeding...in fact I loved all the lines

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  14. Very expressive choicest words, Saru:)

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  15. Lonely we were, lonely we are and the same will continue - you conveyed this point perfectly Saru..

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  16. beautifully written .. i liked this style of writing poem within a pic.. expresses more feelings and makes it more meaningful !

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  17. very sad and lonely feeling! beautiful words!!

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  18. I could be alone as I have always been.
    You amaze me!

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  19. "I laughed with my bleeding eyes" beautifully written :)

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  20. It's sad but heart touching...beautiful !! Many Congrats. :)

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  21. This is Awesome..Congrats Saru..

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  22. beautiful poem full of feelings

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  23. Some black and white memories
    Some wounded old dreams..
    Feels like this is the story of everyone :)

    This poem touches that part of the heart which we have kept untouched since a long time.

    Can just say it is painfully beautiful :)

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  24. Deep thought and very well expressed ...!!
    Congratulations for getting ur book published Saru.......!!

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  25. beautiful.. constant inner struggle..
    feeling alone even when u r with someone..
    u expressed that brilliantly :)

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  26. 'Black and white memories'; 'wounded old dreams. Nice weave with words.

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  27. lovely creation full of emotions as always :)

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  28. Ouch! A garland of emotions...I wish happiness for happiness for everyone... :)

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  29. Saru this is beautiful and I love the way you've presented it

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  30. Oh Saru this is so sad & so well expressed-i can feel it all within me--but no, we ought not to give in to such feelings.They are better expressed & then taken out of the system.

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  31. oh loneliness.. that was really a sad and killing company. profound and such a beautifully composed poem. loved it..

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  32. Congrats on publication . That was really very expressive .

    Travel India

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  33. I believe almost all of us go through these feelings...but you've penned it down so very beautifully. Congrats! :)

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  34. The pathos is this poem is touching. Totally worth getting published :)

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  35. amazing as ever Saru :) .... not all confess they need the shoulders , that they are tired .. alone .... absolute brilliance !!

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  36. beautiful poem, words touched my heart

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  37. Wonderful piece........

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  38. I think I connected to this poem on a much more deeper level when I read it now as compared to when I read this long time ago. Very beautiful and soulful. The emotions associated with it can never truly be described in words. Thank you for this, Saru. :)

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  39. Touching lines, Saru. Love the way you have brought in different emotions as the lines progress.

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  40. Beautifully expressed, Saru...:) Loved the usage of words...:)

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  41. Sad. Touching.... I think it would be appropriate to quote Shelley from the "To a Skylark":
    "Our sweetest songs are those that tell of saddest thought" - Shelley

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  42. Excellent Saru! This made me remember a poem from my favourite Bengali poet - Jibanananda Das
    Here goes the translation in English -
    For thousands of years I roamed the paths of this earth,
    From waters round Ceylon in dead of night to Malayan seas.
    Much have I wandered. I was there in the grey world of Asoka
    And Bimbisara, pressed on through darkness to the city of Vidarbha.
    I am a weary heart surrounded by life's frothy ocean.
    To me she gave a moment's peace -- Banalata Sen from Natore.

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  43. A very touching poem Saru! beautifully expressed poem!
    I can relate well to this sad yet beautiful poem :)

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  44. A well expressed.. Touching words..Thanks for sharing :)

    http://sushlaventulip06.blogspot.in/

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  45. It's so nice that you aren't alone, Darling!
    Nice one! :)

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  46. Inner struggle! but that keeps you move on.

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  47. 'wounded old dreams'; 'laugh with bleeding eye' - Saru! Poignant words of pain.

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  48. Bittersweet Saru!!! my favorite kind!! well expressive.. And Congratulation on being published. :)

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  49. I'm not sure in what context you've written this. But from my perspective what I feel is, at the superficial level things may seem good. but when we dig deeper, the unanswered questions and bleeding eyes, have so many tales to tell. It is only when we find a comforting shoulder that we ourselves get to know what is bothering us deep within, when we try to communicate our troubles with a dear one. Very nicely written. :-)

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  50. The emotion is very well embedded into the poem. The last line is very saddening. Congratulations for getting published!

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  51. I fail to understand the irony why sad and beautiful go together!

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  52. this is called touch of sorrow..!:)

    grt one..saru..!

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  53. beautifully written Saru.

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  54. ds 1 jst made me cry....beautiful work...

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  55. omg, really sad! it made me think of some things from the past. Music heals, respect!

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  56. Wounded old dreams....the line reminds/invoke so many feelings!!
    A great piece of art Saru!!

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