The Last Letter

On moonlit night, I sigh!
Of incessant love, you may say.
Beholding the hopes high,
Our paths would cross one day.
Sinking alone in mellow light, 
I read his last letter.
Wonder, what could I write?
What words would be better?
Indigo days, sober nights, 
Of fallen petals and love.
Or shall I not write, 
Not make our parting tough.

Sitting alone, searching for my broken star.
Wish, I wish, time would heal these scars.

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Comments

  1. Some scars unfortunately are never healed!
    Beautifully expressed pain...Loved the words 'indigo nights'.

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  2. Sorry...Indigo days! Both sounds great though ;-)

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    1. Yeah both sounds great and as I always say poetry is open to all kinds of interpretation. Thanks for reading Shaifali :)

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  3. Aw! That's sad!

    Or shall I not write,
    Not make our parting tough. - This made it even sad!

    This is like each phrase speaks a thousand words, Saru! You brought out the melancholy just perfectly.

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    1. Harsha this is the rejected poem from IBL. But I am super glad you liked it. :)

      XOXOXO:)

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  4. What a beautiful sonnet. I wish this post was submitted for the Poetry genre, a winner all the way. :)

    Thanks to IBL, I was able to learn what a sonnet is, am now able to appreciate and understand such kinds of poems even more. Loved it Saru. :))

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    1. Akshay, I wrote this sonnet for IBL but my captain rejected it. He said it is not a sonnet in its true form.

      *Sobs*

      Thanks for liking it and I believe poetry is something which should touch hearts irrespective of form or rhyme.

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  5. Lovely one, Saru. Some scars never heal...The pain remains forever, reminds us of the parting all the time:(

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    1. True, it remains there, though the intensity decreases with time...

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  6. lovely :)
    but plz dnt let go yr love :)

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  7. Indigo days,...of fallen petals....it's painful to let it go...

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  8. often those scars speaks of my past...
    lovely post
    Weakest LINK

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    1. Sorry to know that...Thanks for reading Rachit!

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  9. Touching piece, Saru. So beautifully written!!
    Sadly, one has to carry the scar through many days. Reliving the past can be painful...

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    1. True Ma'am and thanks for reading and appreciating:)

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  10. Saru, a lovely poignant read! Of Fallen petals! One could not have written a better sonnet as Akshay says....a winner all the way!

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    1. Sir I read yours and that was wonderful. Humbled with your comment.:)

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  11. Really liked the smooth flow of this poem capturing the angst of the woman.

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  12. Lovely words Saru! I look forward to a poem with lot of hopes and joy. Sorry if this sounds like a video on demand in this hedonistic era. :)

    Pain is forgotten when your mind is occupied. When one is immersed in work or hobby or anything which ensures that the person is focused, the pains of the past is completely forgotten.

    Cheers,
    Sabyasachi

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    1. Even I don't like sad poems, I will try writing a happy one next time. You are right, being busy helps.

      Thanks for reading. It's a pleasure having you here:)

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  13. Beautiful and slow, Pain sometimes just refuses to go away how much ever we wish it to... you expressed it so beautifully :)

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  14. This was so beautiful and poignant.

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  15. A big wow for a soulful and touching poem....just loved the ending superb

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  16. Beautiful one.. and that's true, time can heal almost everything..

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    1. Yeah, depends more on your attitude. Thanks for reading Abhinav:)

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  17. very nice...
    i love when broken hearts speak..

    anu

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  18. Your poetry always touches my heart.. Time heals but not all scars sigh!

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    1. Your comment rhymed. I read it many times... You are right not all scars can be healed...

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  19. Saru

    This ones a good proof that poems do not need to be long and use very complicated words to be beautiful. Loved it.(As always) :)

    Coincidentally I am reading about your Ingigo nights as I am installing Eclipse Indigo Software on my machine side by side...ha ha...Totally not related though :D

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    1. LOL...Techie I tell you, I'm married to one btw...:)

      Thanks for such a beautiful comment Jayashree.:)

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  20. The pain is expressed very beautifully! Touching poem and I can surely relate. :)

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    1. I hate when you say you can relate to it. I don't want you to be in pain...Cheer up!

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  21. beautiful poem
    but I work the other way .. why would we want the scars t be filled, if they do we are going to be treated the same agian.. but if we remember the pain then maybe second time we will be more attentive and not let it happen to us ..

    Open letter to all Indians-Bikram's

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    1. That's a good perspective, works in worldly matter but alas heart knows no such logic.

      Thanks for reading Bikram:)

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  22. The Last letter .. reminds me of someone :-)

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  23. Or shall I not write,
    Not make our parting tough.... beautifully expressed as always!

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  24. surely time will heal.. nice lines Saru :)

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  25. I don't think this was submitted on behalf of the Bangalore team! You should have submitted it, Saru! It would given your team a sweeping victory!

    Such beautiful lines! Loved this one, especially:

    "Beholding the hopes high,
    Our paths would cross one day"

    Though am not able to comment on every single poem of yours, I read them whenever I can. Your verses become beautiful day by day! Keep blogging, Saru :)

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    1. This was rejected by my captain...:'(

      Thanks for such a beautiful comment. You know how much I love reading you, even if it's a comment:)

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  26. ..absolutely beautiful!
    I loved 'indigo days and sober nights' in particular..

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  27. Some scars truly don't heal. Another gem from you, Saru!

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  28. The last two lines were perfect!

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  29. Beautiful expression of pain Saru.. Awesome.. Got me in tears actually:):)

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    1. I have to call you for this comment Swati. Thanks for reading :)

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  30. touched my heart ! amazing lines ... felt like ...my emotions got words.. very very nice poem!

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    1. Thank you but please check you blog, I tried many times to post a comment but couldn't.

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  31. Very beautiful poem....Loved this line..."Indigo days, sober nights,"....Touching...

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  32. "what words would be better?"......exactly! sometimes it seems very tough to put your words in a manner that they would be able to convey your heart to that special person :(

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    1. Yeah, sometimes we don't get the right words and sometimes words are not enough to convey our feelings. That reminds me of Words by Boyzone...

      Thanks for reading Gayatri!

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  33. I came to read this again! Early in the morning before work :p Awesome, Saru! Simply loved it :)

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  34. Very nice poem depicting both beauty and pain in one stroke.

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    1. WOW, it's a very beautiful way of putting it. Thank you!

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  35. abab * 3 quartererien and a cuplet aa, nicely written....

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  36. a tale of sorrow
    yet a manifestation of strength..

    lovely poem saruji :)

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  37. Beautiful poem Saru. Simple and sublime..
    Keep writing and just remember that time is the best healer :)

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  38. There is a peace in your words...even though, it's the cross road where one is standing. :D

    Love it! :)

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    1. Thank you so much for reading and a beautiful comment:)

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  39. I think I would write. I need a closure. To live with the hope of what would happen, would be painful for me.

    I totally loved the poem, but these lines just blew me away:

    Beholding the hopes high,Our paths would cross one day

    So many people live with this hope. So many hearts have broken when this hope crashes. Wonderful as awlays Saru!

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    1. Your comment is a vista for many poems. Thanks for a wonderful comment. It's powerful enough to inspire.

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  40. Some scans remain. And you know, I feel, those scars should remain. It either reminds us of the person / incident / mistake one had or committed in the past.

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    1. I think many would agree with your belief.
      Thanks for reading Binu!

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  41. LOVED the depth of the emotions. Keep writing. :)

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  42. Beautiful is all I can say!
    magic in your words :)

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  43. Beautifully written. :D Wish to read more soon!!

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  44. Beautifully written and as they say, time is the best healer...:)

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  45. aahh..beautiful! you rock in the genre as usual!

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  46. Beautiful with pain! Great written as you can:-)

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  47. What a painful, yet beautiful flow Saru! 2Indigo days, sober nights, Of fallen petals and love" -- Re-read them so many times..Loved them!

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    1. I think that is the popular line from the poem. Thanks for reading dear:)

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  48. beautifully written.... you are a poet at heart :)

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  49. Beautifully expressed... I think you should write back.. Cause later this will bother u.. Ki kash kah diya hota.. :-)

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    1. Haan...Kah dena chahiye, pata nahi fir moka mile na mile. Thanks for reading and welcome here:)

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  50. I can well relate to the longing you've portrayed in your poem, Saru..makes me nostalgic..

    you always manage express so much in such less words.Keep up the good work!god bless! :)

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    1. You know I am trying to increase the length of my poems. This was written as a sonnet otherwise I would have added a line or two.

      Thanks for a beautiful comment dear:)

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  51. So beautifully written, I really like the ending.

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  52. Saru.. I am in awe of the emotional power your words wield on the reader. For a moment, you transcend the reader into the realm of the underlying emotion. I was transfixed in the silence and the angst of your poem and gripped by the intensity, yet sublime subtlety and the tranquil beauty of your words. It took me a while to recover and that too reluctantly! Fascinating piece yet again! :)

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    1. Speechless!

      Seriously Raj, you should be a motivational speaker, you can infuse life in a dead with your words. Forget the poem, please teach me how to write such beautiful and inspiring comments.

      It's an honor to have you on this blog. Can't thank you enough!

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    2. Saru.. trust me.. it is just the effect of the poem on my faculty! :) It is so phenomenally good that my comment could have borrowed a little from its genius! :)

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    3. *Humbled*

      Thanks for gracing this blog with your presence.:)

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  53. An Intimate expression of Pain .. very nice

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  54. Sitting alone, searching for my broken star.
    Wish, I wish, time could heal these scars.. waah waahh.. :)

    its verry lovely.. you know i have noticed, as i read your writings, it feels like i am living that character or that emotion.. you are awesome..

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  55. Lovely, beautiful and extraordinary!
    Loved it:)
    Keep Rocking!

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  56. sooooo good triggering y past life a bit lovely article very touching.

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  57. A sonnet for IBL!!!! Bingo...u too are participating :)
    While I was reading, suddenly I saw 'of fallen petals', and realized it was for IBL...in fact, I wrote one too for IBL...

    Perfect rhyming, and meaningful, feels as if I am reading a story.

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    1. Hemant, Vinu rejected by entry. *SOBS*

      Kidding, glad you liked it.:)

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  58. How tough is parting and how churning the mind that goes through atrocities inflicted by it!
    Well brought out Saru :-)

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    1. Parting is really tough. Thanks for reading and for a lovely comment Suruchi. :)

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  59. Crossing paths is the one thing I am scared off :)
    and Indigo Days-that's a rare expression! beautiful :)

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    1. Crossing path with your ex is scary. Thanks for reading and liking the phrase.:)

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  60. Oh, I feel that time is a big healer. Thanks for reading Ashwini.:)

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  61. Made me remind the last line of the Hariharan song "Krishna "- "time is the healer ... time moves on ... I m waiting .. "

    Couldn't stop myself from mentioning it in the comment. .. truly beautiful ...

    Although, time is the greatest healer, some scars never completely heal ... only the pain reduces with time .. or may be we learn to live with it .. never stop writing please .. :-)

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    1. I will try finding the song.

      Everyone has their own perception when it comes to time, pain and scars. Though being positive helps a lot in the long run.

      Thanks for a wonderful comment and welcome here.

      I won't stop writing :)

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  62. beautiful... beautiful and beautiful...

    the last two lines are awesome.... great work... :)

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  63. indigo days......good..

    loved it actually....
    ending is good...these scars am not sure...can be healed or not???

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    1. Yeah, this is a very personal issue, no strict rules for healing. Glad you liked it. Thanks for reading!

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  64. That is very very touching poetry Saru.. I dunno how my comments vanished here..

    Someone is Special

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    1. Really? I checked in the spam but there is nothing there. Sorry. Thanks for liking the poem SIS:)

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  65. Wow.. Amazing.. Loved your writing...

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  66. soooo cute...awwsOme :)

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  67. A beautiful piece.
    I like the fallen petals line very much.
    And the italic part is a wonderful and apt closing:)
    Would love to read more:):)

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    1. Thank you so much Geetanjali and welcome here :)

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  68. sometimes it's just so difficult to give words to what you're feeling.
    there are moments when you have to part, even without knowing why but you know you must. what would you say then? you can't even say what you have to do. no words are easier than others to write....

    kudos,
    Mohit

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    1. Sometimes, words fail us...Thanks for reading Mohit. :)

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  69. touching poem again, Saru. :)
    our instinct is to bury the pain deep down in our hearts. but when it crops up- life ceases to treat you nicely.

    Or shall I not write,
    Not make our parting tough?
    You left me without a breath or goodbye,
    you never even gave it a try,
    Should've known I was so perfectly blind,
    a love I'll never again find..

    Just a little add-on.. Hope it doesn't tarnish your post. :)

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    1. That's beautiful. How lovely it feels when like-minded people interact and bring more beauty to the poem. Thanks a million for those awesome lines. :)

      Don't ever use strong words like tarnish :)

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    2. Thank You.
      And my mistake, won't ever use. Tarnish is on the rare-use shelf now. :)

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  70. Just dont how to appreciate your poems. Mouth zipped !

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    1. What I say now, except for a humble thank you. :)

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  71. Painful, but letting it go and moving on is so much better...
    Indigo days...nice expression there Saru.

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  72. Powerful words. Some scars never heal.

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