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चिराग लेके मैंने ढूँढाचौखट चौबारा!
निगोड़ी रात में फिर अपने हाथ पे लिखा नाम तुम्हारा!!
जब तुम जाते होकुछ रोज के लिए बाहर,
तुम्हारे पीछे पीछे ये मन भी हो जाता है बंजारा!
अकेली रातो में फिर, अपने हाथ पे नाम लिखती हूँ तुम्हारा!!
सुध बुध खो कर, बैठती हूँ उस कोने में,
चाय की प्याली के संग, तुम्हारी यादें बनती है मेरा सहारा!
तनहा रातो में फिर, अपने हाथ पे नाम लिखती हूँ तुम्हारा!!
चिराग लेके ढूँढती हूँ, चौखट चौबारा!
निगोड़ी रात में फिर,अपने हाथ पे नाम लिखती हूँ तुम्हारा!!
~सरू सिंघल~

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  1. तुम्हारी यादें बनती है मेरा सहारा !
    तनहा रातो में फिर,
    अपने हाथ पे नाम लिखती हूँ तुम्हारा !!
    चिराग लेके ढूँढती हूँ,
    चौखट चौबारा !
    Beautiful....

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  2. वियोग ने कितनी ही गोपियाँ, राधायें और मीरा को जन्म दिया होगा, जिन्होंने प्रीतम कि याद में कुछ ऐसा ही कहा होगा!

    उत्तम!

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  3. जब तुम जाते हो,
    कुछ रोज के लिए बाहर,
    तुम्हारे पीछे पीछे,
    ये मन भी हो जाता है बंजारा !
    अकेली रातो में फिर,
    अपने हाथ पे नाम लिखती हूँ तुम्हारा !!
    vry impressive

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    1. Thanks, these are my favorite lines from this poem. :)

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  4. Highly romantic :) and the feelings expressed are awesome .

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  5. बहुत सुन्दर .. rhythmic and lyrical...

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  6. Need an English version :). I know Hindi, but it's been a decade I read something. :) Got the gist of it though.

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    1. Thanks for reading and I will post something in English next Monday.

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  7. A lovely poetic verse of separation and passions, Saru:) Keep going!

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  8. Wow, such beauty woven so simply Saru...
    No mess, nothing extra-just the right amount of words to express the right amount of pining :-)

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    1. Suruchi, my mother-in-law said I should write little longer poems than this. What do you think? BTW,Thanks for a lovely comment:)

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  9. निगोड़ी रात में फिर,
    अपने हाथ पे नाम लिखती हूँ तुम्हारा !!

    Awesome!! :)

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  10. सुध बुध खो कर,
    बैठती हूँ उस कोने में,
    चाय की प्याली के संग,

    सुन्दर भावमय कोमल सी रोमांटिक अभिव्यक्ति.
    इस 'चाय की प्याली' की भी महिमा है निराली.

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    1. A cup of tea can do wonders, for sure and thank you so much for reading Sir.

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  11. bahut hi shandar
    romantic poem
    सुध बुध खो कर,
    बैठती हूँ उस कोने में,
    चाय की प्याली के संग,
    तुम्हारी यादें बनती है मेरा सहारा !
    तनहा रातो में फिर,
    अपने हाथ पे नाम लिखती हूँ तुम्हारा !!

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  12. Waah ... What a lovely coincidence ki आज की हमारी और आपकी कवितायो के शीर्षक एक हैं। भाव पूर्ण कविता है, बहुत सुंदर।

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    1. It was a beautiful co-incidence and glad you liked it:)

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  13. How sweet:) This is the story of every girl in love :) Needless to say that its beautiful :).. *love*

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  14. beautiful again!

    madhur aur sureeley ye bol aapke,
    hmm.. kya kahe..? bass mann ko chuu gaye :)

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    1. :) Thanks for such a beautiful comment. :) :) :)

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  15. A cute hindi poem,, hath pe likhti hu naam tumhara,, so sweet..

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  16. pangs of separation.. n the twinges of melancholy is reflecting in each line..
    soulfully written Saru..

    Loved it :)

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  17. "Jab bhi saans leta hoon, mahek tumhari pass rehti hai..
    Nigahen aksar puchti hai,..wo kaun hai jo,. Hamesha mujhme basi rehti hai…
    very nice...

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    1. Beautiful couplet and thanks for reading Bhargav:)

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  18. beautiful words Saru. Nice to read Hindi after a long time.

    But you know, sometimes it feel like a curse to be so madly in love with someone. Living alone then becomes tough isn't it. And then focurse there the fear of one being taken for granted?

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    1. Yes of course, as you said later, too much dependence is too bad. Sorry, your comment went into spam.:(

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  19. Most enjoyable piece of writing..
    by the hand and at the Hand.
    A handful Congratulation!
    for your Book Publication.

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    1. Thank you so much for your wishes Sir and for reading :)

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  20. जिंदा तस्वीर है यहाँ ,आँखों से नहीं ज़रा दिल से देखें
    शब्दों का ताना- बाना तो कोई तुमसे सीखे :))

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  21. Tender & loving as usual--you express these sentiments so nicely.

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    1. Thank you so much Ma'am and I was so happy to read your poems. :)

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  22. Viyog shrangaar ka behad sundar chitran:)
    It's so beautifully done, Saru!

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  23. Very nicely written. saadgi se piroye shabd bahut sundar lage.
    Good Luck.

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  24. Didn't understand much of Hindi! So I google gives me the option of translation into english! Lovely use of words!

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    1. Thanks Danny, I will be posting something in English this Monday. Hope you will read and enjoy it:)

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  25. You have to write a comment on love posts. These kind of remarks are not acceptable. :)

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  26. beautiful read it the second time ..wr ws d 1st time , FB ???

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    1. Don't know Alka, this is for the first time I shared it. Thanks for reading dear!

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  27. Saru, this is so lovely, such a romantic read!

    Do stop by my blog sometime! :) http://e-pinion.blogspot.in

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  28. Poetic brilliance Saru! You captured the emotions perfectly. By the way, hows the book release going? And where's my free copy? :P

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    1. Release was good and this is not my book Binu. I am just a part of it. For my individual book, I will give you and ask for a review. Thanks for reading and for a lovely comment!

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  29. Saru, I had posted a comment, and now I dont know where it went :-(

    The poem is brilliant as always, and hindi poems(although i take some time to read and understand are always a master piece).
    On a different note, too much of dependance of a person can be so fatal. Your life just revolving around one person.

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    1. You comment went into spams. I found few more along with yours there, thank you for that. Even I don't believe in being dependent on someone to that extent, the other person starts taking you for granted. Love should be more of a balanced emotion.

      Thanks for reading and helping me trace few other comments.

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  30. birhaa....................

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  31. virah vyatha ka sateek chitrankan...
    bahut khoob!

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  32. U tube par Ashok ji dwara aapke aur Rakesh ji se huyee blogging par sarthak vaarta sunkar bahut achha laga....

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    1. It was an honor meeting them and thanks for watching :)

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  33. तनहा रातो में फिर,
    अपने हाथ पे नाम लिखती हूँ तुम्हारा !!
    चिराग लेके ढूँढती हूँ,
    चौखट चौबारा !

    lovely ... i m your latest follower ..:)

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  34. Kya baat hai saru...miya ji par bada pyaar aaya:):):)

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  35. Beautiful words, Saru! When I saw the title, I was reminded of the "Tum bin jaaon kahan" song.

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    1. It is such a beautiful and soulful song. Thanks for a lovely comment Rachna:)

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  36. I do not understand, but the picture is beautiful! Thanks for your visit. I have been absent without creativity a while, but hope it's back.

    Hugs from north:-)

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    1. Welcome back Tania. And it's so good to see you back. I missed your shots!

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  37. Waah! kya baat hai.
    Sunder Kavita. :)

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  38. You poems in Hindi really gets to me, especially about Love and separation. Read it twice! :)

    PS: So so sorry for such a late comment Saru. :(

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    1. No worries Akshay. Thanks for reading and liking it.

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  39. WOW.. phewwwwwwwwwwwwwww, finally reached the bottom , but then if you write so beautiful then obviously people admire and you get so many compliments ....

    loved reading it saru mam... :)

    Bikram's

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    1. Thank you so much Bikram. Even I scroll this much to write something on your blog...:) :) :)

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  40. That was a very soulful poem, Saru :):) You're writing awesome Hindi poems these days :)

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  41. This reminded me of 'Un Bin Kate Na Raina' :)

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  42. she writes words,
    and she romance with her pen!
    'Do you write the name on the arm?'
    I loved the repetition of the line; the form!
    Keep writing,
    I keep reading,
    the translation!
    Thank you!

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    1. special thanks for the picture as well! I'm a mad fan of Aishu!

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    2. Thanks SIS for making the effort and reading it. This is a sweet gesture on your part. And no wonder you are a mad fun of Ash, she is drop dead gorgeous.

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    3. She was, she is and she will be...!

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  43. Wah chaa gaye saru ji !
    Likhe haath pe naam tumhara
    Tumhi ho jisne mera jeevan sanwaara !!!

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    1. Good one Mak and it rhymed as well. Thanks for reading:)

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  44. wooow Saru .. beautiful poem !

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  45. That's such a soft n romantic piece, Saru! Dil ko chu gaya...

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  46. That was really touching and soul stirring....beautifully written.

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  47. awesome poem :)
    but it would been even better if not for the aiswarya's poem. let your pristine prose create its own unique image in each reader's mind as she/he would have it :)

    mohit

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  48. *aishwarya's pic
    correction plz :D

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    1. I normally put a picture and couldn't find better than this. However, some feel this added to the beauty of the poem. I think we all have our perspectives.

      Glad you liked the poem.:) Thanks for reading :)

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  49. bahut khoob...
    तुम्हारे पीछे पीछे,
    ये मन भी हो जाता है बंजारा !
    lines dil ko chhu gyi..

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  50. dil ko chhu lene wali behad bhavnatmak kavita

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