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Monday, November 14, 2016

Girl With Extra Baggage*



I hurried to the station
I missed few beats
I skipped few steps
I did all so I could make it on time
I had to
You were waiting for me
I reached an abandoned station
Empty platform stared at me
My tears gave me company
A gentle mismatched stream
Left eye was in a rush
Shedding every bit of hope through it
I imagined a thousand scenarios
Something happened to you
Someone said something to you
Even in my misery
All I thought was - you
About half an hour later
I hurried back to my house
I didn't miss a beat
I didn't skip any step
I did all so I could to make it before dinner
I had to
Though no one was waiting for me
But when I reached home
I found out how it felt to be homeless within four walls
.
.
.
I built four walls around you
Called you home
You left and made my heart homeless

*She carried only three dresses in the bag but a big tsunami inside her.

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62 comments:

  1. That was heartbreakingly beautiful Saru.

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    1. Thank you for the first part and sorry for the second. :)

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  3. Intense feeling of loneliness and separation.

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  4. Heart piercing words dipped in true feelings, beautifully penned.

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  5. Poignant and beautiful :) Love the intensity of emotions portrayed to the core!

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  6. Pieces of heart scattered here and there after reading this Post!

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    1. Ouch, that's not a good feeling at all. Hugs, Pooja :)

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  7. Emotional tsunami well expressed!

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  8. This is brilliant. So well written Saru

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  9. That was just awesome, so short, but it hit my heart in a way it was supposed to!

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  10. So poignant and simply written!! Loved this post!!

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  11. Moving. Each line powerful, poignant and laden with meaning.

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  12. Beautifully written, Saru! I agree, the feeling of loneliness hurts the most!

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    1. Being lonely when you don't want to is a curse. It breaks you beyond mends.

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  13. Thats when you invest in relationship but he relationship does not invest in you. Fact of life :(
    numerounity.com

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  14. Touching one, Saru.
    I guess time is a healing factor.

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    1. Time is surely a healer. Thanks for reading, Anita.

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  15. That was an emotional one!
    Nicely written.. :)

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  16. Nice write up Saru. Always good visiting your blog after many-a-days. However this felt a lil' underdone, a bit hurried, was it?

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    1. No, not from my side. Sorry, if you feel that way.

      And it's always good to hear from you, Pratik. Thank you for reading.

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  17. sad .. I wish and hope no one has to go thoruhg this ever ...

    Bikram's

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  18. Yes, heart became homeless as love wandered off.... Beautiful depiction of the yearning for love, the pain of abandonment and the emptiness of beats and steps that rhythmically follow one another on a hopeless path.

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    1. That's a very beautiful way to put it, Sunaina.

      Thank you so much for reading.

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  19. Brilliant and touching that it tears the heart. Your poem echoes the lives of so many across this world.

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  20. Such a soulful poem... to be honest I remembered Bipasha sitting on stairs after Ranbir dumps her in that movie Bachna Ae Haseeno.....as your words captured the emotions so brilliantly

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    1. I have to watch this movie now. Thank you for gracing this blog with your presence, Prasad.

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  21. Beautiful, beautiful lines. Touched the soul.
    This is killer "I found out how it felt to be homeless within four walls".

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  22. So beautifully written Saru..but then , what else I expect ! Lived it!

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  23. Beautifully written, Saru. Loved the way you narrated in poetry and didn't try to look for rhythm. Unique!

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  24. beautiful! a story in a poem! Wow Saru :)

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