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Monday, March 11, 2013

67% Discounted



I stubbed my cigarette,
Naked I walk.
On a broken trail,
In the noise of a monologue.
Truth is a product,
I bought 'it' on discount.
Applauding myself in soliloquy, 
On the bargain so profound.
25% thrashed, for world so corrupt,
15% more for shredding peer's trust.
10% lost in commercialisation wave,
15% goes to how we behave.
2% is the surcharge,
For making life unbelievingly large.
Go, add your reasons for heavier rebate,
No one cares about truth, of late.
Wait! I found what's bothering me inside,
Killing me for buying stale lot.
Wiser men stayed away,
What I grabbed, no one ever bought.

*Read the footnote here
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124 comments:

  1. A chilling look at consumerism and politics.

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  2. Ahha!!! What an insighful post. Reading the title I thought it's some promotional post of some product.:P But whoaa! You have so precisely scribbled about the truth bought on discount. I'm first time here to thank you for reading me at Indivine. Thank-you :)
    Silly Smiles... Take you Miles :)

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    1. Glad you like it Surbhi and welcome here.

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  3. What do I say here....I daily have debate on this 'The Truth' with my family and friends....I always tell them that Truth is not what is visible....it's an illussion...
    another nice way to describe truth..

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    1. Going by what is happening all around us, we can say that truth is nothing more than an illusion. Thanks for reading Hemant.

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  4. Awesome Saru...:) The value of truth is lost. It sure scary, but hope that this commercialisation of truth stops.

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    1. I doubt that Prashanth, we are diving into it like never before.

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  5. Calculations all around..May it be anything..from emotions to relations ,from products to humans,from truth to fiction..Deep insightful poem indeed ..I second Surbhi..

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    1. Yeah, sad but true :(

      Thanks for reading!

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  6. Awesome!! So insightful and so true!

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  7. Well, that is one explanation of what is happening with truth today, isn't it? Sad are the state of affairs. But, of course, who has the time to look at the mirror?
    If you don't mind my saying - shouldn't it be 'of late' rather than 'off late'?

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    1. Nobody, we are busy in the mindless pursuit. Thanks for pointing the error and I never mind. :)

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  8. amazing! i loved the concept...keep writing dear :)

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  9. Beautiful, powerful and I can feel the depth in those words.
    Hats off, Saru! Love reading your poems.

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  10. Imagine the real worth when 67% is on discount. Nice one Saru:)

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    1. Value of truth is always great but sadly, we fail to acknowledge it. Thanks for reading Sir.

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  11. Good one Saru. So insightful and power packed words.

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  12. the real value of truth is lost forever .. what truth is present today is no truth but all fake!

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  13. A little bit spooky...but reality isnt it.

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  14. simply poweful :) loved it Saru :)

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  15. Excellent concept about politics and consumer advertising. I'd curious to know how you came up with the percentages... is that discounted too?! ;-)

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    1. Pretty much, it's just a work of fiction so I went with my instincts. If you want, you can add yours to it. :)

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  16. वाह, पढ़कर डूब सा गया..

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  17. It's a reality in this dark world.
    Very Interesting! Loved it! :)

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  18. This is amazing! The topic, the language, the rhyme...just everything...brilliant!

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  19. I was just thinking what all could be the reasons to add for heavier rebate... so much malice around
    So well thought and put across...

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    1. True Manjulika, there is so much malice around that we could actually get a heavier rebate on truth. Thanks for reading.

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  20. harsh truth presented so beautifully in words ,, awesome poetry as always and a seriously grt footnote ,,indeed world is getting darker by the day :)

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    1. It is...

      Thanks for reading and appreciating it. :)

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  21. this is unique, good topic selection liked the concept

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  22. And truth my friend, is always bitter!
    The words you've chosen are so apt and brings out a great poetry!

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    1. It is Anu. Thanks for liking the poem. :)

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  23. Insightful and beautifully written! I love how well you transcribe your thoughts so well! And +1 for the picture. :)

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    1. Thanks Rachit for a wonderful comment. I too love the picture :)

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  24. Love your thoughts and their presentation! Beautiful!!

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  25. hey i have added you on google followers, add my site too......... thanks

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  26. Such a hard hitting truth presented in a realistic way, Saru. That 15% blame/credit on us should be much higher because I am a lot more cynical in that aspect. It is our mindset that make us not believe what other's say. Our conscience is responsible for not trusting one another. Again, we are the ones responsible for commercializing everything.

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    1. Yeah, cynicism is pretty high, I witness it on a daily basis. For almost everything we are responsible, we have stooped so low that we want end results at any cost.

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  27. Truth expressed in written words...gr8 one Saru. Only daring writers can do that... :)

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    1. Thanks for an encouraging comment Priti :)

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  28. Great one on reality and truth Mrs.Saru ma'am...I am so lucky to be associated with such a talented poet like you ma'am:)

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    1. Pleasure is all mine Bushra and we can leave Mrs and Ma'am. We are good without that :)

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  29. So true, and so unfortunate too. Very powerfully written, Saru.

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  30. We all live in cage. Only truth shall set us free! But where is truth?

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    1. Truth is the most endangered thing. However, in our hearts we all know what is true and what is right.

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  31. As a poem it is perfectly written...but lets fact it...the world was designed to be a mean place right from the begining. It runs on the 'survival of fittest' principle, so lies, deceit, jealously etc negativity has been around since time immemorial and will be there even after we perish...and thats the truth ...lol ( donno if i understand what i'm writing myself )

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    1. I understand you but somehow things are becoming dark day by day. Remember when we were teens, how the phrase, 'I Love You' was sacred. Now it is the most diluted one. Strange, isn't it!

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  32. So true, Saru. Nicely expressed.

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  33. Very well expressed saru !! Deep notes on truth..

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  34. Haha Nice one :) But why 67? why not the round figure 70? :)

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    1. 2/3rd of every statement is a lie, that's how I conceived the poem. You can add or subtract your own reasons though Jahid :)

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  35. What I grabbed, no one ever bought.


    True:)
    never thought this way :)

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    1. Yeah, we fell for it. Thanks for reading Nikhil :)

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  36. Similar to Megadeth's "Peace sells, but who's buying?" I loved reading your 'truth sells, but who's buying?'
    I like it that the author regrets more that she bought something unwanted rather than having bought something unique.

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    1. Sadly, people buy anything if sold in the right manner. Truth has lost its meaning. Glad you liked it. Thanks for reading. :)

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  37. Great! Love your perspective <3

    love
    http://www.meghasarin.com

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  38. Wonderful..truth is so hard to get these days...

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  39. Awesome poem and attached note, Saru. Very impressed. As for truth, all we can do is try to speak it and live it. As for others, it is enough to recognise them for what they are as most people appreciate honesty and get put off lies.

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    1. Deep within we all know what is true and what's not. Sometimes, we don't have the courage to speak it. As you said, we should try. Thanks a lot for liking the poem, coming from you, it means a lot.

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  40. A glass can be considered half-full or half-empty and both interpretations are right
    Truth no matter how much discounted will still be truth. In our hearts we all that finding truth is not like shades of grey but it's simple case of black and white.
    Beautiful poem!

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    1. I totally loved your perspective Kirti. Thanks for reading. :)

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  41. That's what I call modern contemporary poetry. My number crunching friends would be proud to read this. Valiant attempt Saru!

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  42. Amazingly true....such a poignant poem, Saru.

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  43. Very true poem on truth Saru! Beautifully written!

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  44. Just wanted to know...Why do you disable comments for Quote posts? Any particular reason?

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    1. I write couplets/quotes which I want everyone to read and I post it whenever I feel like but I don't have enough time to reply to two posts in a week. Hence, no comments. Also, it's more of fun to me. :) BTW, glad you asked. :)

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  45. Trust was, is and will always be stranger than fiction Saru.. Very well written yaar.. :)

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    1. I think all good things are vanishing from this world. Thanks for reading and appreciating Binu. :)

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  46. what a piece! you amaze your readers with every post of yours..

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    1. Thanks Pratik for an encouraging comment. It means a lot to me. :)

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  47. Very true, Saru! Your writing is always hard hitting and profound and this one is no different. Great going. :-)

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    1. Thanks Arti for your encouraging comments. :)

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  48. Truth is a product,
    I bought 'it' on discount...
    loved this... sometimes I wonder how much of our lives is controlled by mere numbers

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    1. I think a lot of things are controlled by numbers and we are in a rat race. We have to learn to see the deeper meaning of life. Thanks for reading Jyoti. :)

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  49. Profound thoughts expressed beautifully!

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  50. loved the way you have presented relationships..so apt to our current lifestyle and the way we deal with others around and yes with ourselves too...

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