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Monday, April 23, 2012

Marooned, I Am...


Amidst the layers of smile,
I hide my pain,
He pats the surface,
Thinking all is well.
The sore look in my eyes,
Never bothers him a bit,
My eyes not only speak,
They scream, they yell.
It rained last summer,
His skin felt so,
Lying on his shoulder,
When all my tears fell.
Sinking in the non-existent,
I don't know how,
If ever I have to write,
How the word 'life' would spell...


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180 comments:

  1. One of your very beautiful ones and my fav from your creations :)
    It has surpassed what you have written till now in terms of simplicity and yet being so powerful to express pain. I just loved it. I am going to save it in the diary which I read often and consist of my collection of beautiful poems.

    I loved it, Saru.

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  2. You are too good dear :)
    Wonderfully expressed.

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  3. Top to bottom, simply superb....Loved each line...keep it up Saru n keep rocking....

    Cheers!!!

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  4. Wow. Thats so Lovely. Hiding our pain with a smile, and trying to camouflage things so that people don't get to know what is going on inside is, but still we kinda wish the other person could see through and comfort us. Wonderful.
    And for the first time, I'm one among the first commenters. Yay :-)

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    1. Thanks a lot Ash for reading and for your comment.:)

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  5. ""The sore look in my eyes,
    Never bothers him a bit,""""""" i have actually felt & lived these lines and know how it feels

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    1. Not happy to read your comment Sujatha...:(

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  6. wow! superb... :) thank you for the words... :)

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  7. I don't know what else to say which I haven't already said Saru. You amaze me every time with your words. :)

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    1. Thats so sweet of you Akshay but try and find faults in my poems. I will be more than happy to receive criticism from you...:)

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  8. Beautiful and profound as always. I could actually sense many many feelings in each of these lines. You're just so good at it, Saru. This is innate and this is beautiful. :)

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    1. Thank you so much Rachit. It feels great to have a reader like you.

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  9. Eyes speak a language of their own and can never betray the true feeling!. In simplicity of your words lies the beauty, Saru:)

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    1. Thank you Sir. Your words are a source of encouragement.:)

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  10. Eyes can scream loud and they can spill love. Well captured emotions!

    http://rachnaparmar.com

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    1. Indeed Rachna. Thank you so much for reading!

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  11. Beautiful, your words made me speechless . . .

    Ashwini Dey

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  12. Brilliant and very soulful Saru <3 Every line depicts intense emotions. :)

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    1. Thank you so much for reading Harsha. :)

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  13. Elegantly expressed the pain...flow of emotions

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  14. Saru, I think its a boy girl thing.. From a guy's perspective, honestly, its difficult to read a girl's emotions :D

    We trust in "Words". And yes, it is the name of your blog :)

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    1. And that is where guys fail...Just kidding. Thank you for having trust in Words...:)

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  15. So painfully beautiful words...

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  16. eyes, the index of our emotions ...
    liked the line" they rained in summer "... a lovely creation..

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  17. its deep..its painfull and expressive.

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  18. Amidst the layers of smile,
    I hide my pain,
    He pats the surface,
    Thinking all is well.
    The sore look in my eyes,.............just loved these line touches my heart ........really pain full ///////pain speak so much with out words ........

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    1. It sure does and we need to read the emotions of our loved ones many a times to understand it a bit more. Thanks for reading and for your comment Shashi...:)

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  19. hidden pain! well expressed saru! :)

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  20. Very deep emotions. And its easy to relate to. Nice work.

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    1. Thank you Jyothi and welcome here :)

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  21. The eyes scream and yell, but on the surface it seems so calm. Pain, and how we tend to hide it.
    Lovely lines :)

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    1. Thats beautifully expressed Juhi. Thanks for a lovely comment!

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  22. Nothing else makes life more hellish than a lover blind with eyes wide open.
    Beautiful and very emotional poem anyways :-)

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  23. Wonderful piece from you again Saru.:) You're such a great one with sharing emotions.:) Love yah!:)

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    1. Thank you for admiring my style of writing. I owe my poems to all the lovely readers like you :) :) :)

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  24. If ever I have to write,How the word 'life' would spell...such a profound statement.

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    1. Thank you Kitty but when it comes to expressing emotions in few words, you rock at it!!!

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  25. Fantastic. Left me unsettled.

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    1. Sorry to know that and hope you are better now...:)

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  26. jeet gaye aap phir se.. ye likhne ke baad. :-)

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    1. But still I wish I can write like you...You are too good with words :)

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  27. words your blog name and words poems, so beautifully written.

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  28. Brilliantly written - something most of us can relate to.

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  29. I read it many times. I don't know why, it appears to be beyond my skills to reach to the depth of this wonderful work. All I can make out is, its full of emotions.

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    1. First, many thanks for reading it. And second, I hope I can write something which is simple in thoughts. Sorry to disappoint you by making it complex.

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  30. nicely expressed with such soulful lines the lamentation

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  31. Emotions flow
    when you read her,
    You fall into her words;
    I don't know how!
    If ever I have to write,
    How the word 'tear' should be

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  32. painful yet emotional ......liked it so much
    My eyes not only speak,
    They scream, they yell.


    keep smiling :)

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    1. Thank you for reading dear...:) :) :)

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  33. I could relate to this in a lot of ways.
    Sigh, I wish he would feel the real her.

    Beautifully written!!!

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    1. I wish too Jenny but at times I feel it's very difficult what a lady hides in her...

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  34. Hi, came back to your blog after some time. This is well written but I can see that there are some areas of improvement.

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    1. I wish you can specify. Thanks for reading Abhra!!!

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  35. Like always well connected,
    Less words, more impact of Words..
    More the feels, less potent the comment.:)
    Inform! as effective preparation. Good wishes.

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    1. Thanks for a ever meaningful comment Sir.:)

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  36. Life - a series of problems? Or a series of solutions!

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    1. I would love to choose the latter Sir. :)

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  37. "Lying on his shoulder,
    When all my tears fell.
    Sinking in the non-existent,
    I don't know how"

    These four lines touched me the most. Good job.

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  38. that is sad and made me sad too
    why life does this to us I dont know

    I beleive that
    Life plays Jokes on us SO- ha ha ha ha ..

    Bikram's

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    1. Yeah, it's better to laugh at it and with it. Atleast the pain would subside. Thanks for reading Bikram!

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  39. Thats Fabulously written, Good job! Loved reading it

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  40. beautiful--the eyes may scream,but the one who should hear,does not care--it is a tragedy--the levels of sensitivity vary.

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    1. Yeah, we feel at different levels and with variegated sensitivities. Thanks for reading Indu :)

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  41. Beautiful...
    www.rajnishonline.blogspot.com

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  42. This one is a keepsake. :)Your poems are filled with several layers of emotion that touch different readers in different ways. I read it several times and every time it touched me differently. Such is the power of your words.

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    1. Can I ever thank you enough for writing such lovely comments? I think never...It's always a humbling experience to read what you have to say for my words...:)

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  43. Few lines with deep meanings = Saru di

    Beautifully crafted :)

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    1. Awwww....One of the best comments ever. I will cherish it forever...

      Thanks a million!!!

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  44. always a pleasure reading your lines :)

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  45. It is kind of awful how much I relate to this sometimes.

    The last few lines were really, really hauntingly beautiful.

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    1. I am not happy to know that Antara. I wish you relate to more of happy feelings. Thanks a ton for reading dear...:)

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  46. Very beautiful and soulful, eyes are the voice of the soul... how wonderfully expressed.

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  47. 'how the word life would spell' ...these lines are just magic Saru. Wonderful poem dear.

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  48. You are just too good. Beautifully written Saru :)

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    1. Thank you so much Namrata. :) :) :)

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  49. I don't know how,
    If ever I have to write,
    How the word 'life' would spell...

    Loved these lines - very deep and profound!

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  50. Beautiful writing and use of words; you are a gifted writer.

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  51. I can just say wow. Those are some emotionally charged lines. Very soulful indeed.

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  52. Saru, this Poem was so beautiful , and inspiring ...

    loved it from th every start, i usually get hooked to v\certain lines, however, with your poem , i loved each and every word, especially the way it began ..."Amidst the layer of Smile.."

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    1. Thanks dear. I am glad you like the poem. Even I love the start of this one. :)

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  53. one can empathise while reading your words.......i have no words .....damn good...

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  54. I am so touched with your creation... lovely ...

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  55. very touchy...could feel the lines..!
    new to your space..
    interesting space you have here..
    happy followng you..;)
    do stop by mine sometime

    Tasty Appetite

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    1. Thanks for reading and following. Will love to read your space...:)

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  56. gave me goosebumps..dunno y :(

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    1. You know at times I read something and I have nothing to say. Your comment gave me that kinda feeling...

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  57. ஹ ஹ...காதல் வழியை இது எற்றிடுமே...ஏதும் புரியவில்லை, எழுதும் தெரியவில்லை...Ha ha dear friend, once again such a wonderful lovable lines from your pen....

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    1. I translated it to English and this is what I got,

      "Ha Ha ... I do not understand anything ... erritume way, do not write ..."

      Sekar, please comment in English next time, Google translate is unreliable it seems...:)

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  58. Wow.. Loved it Saru.. The inner meaning, the pain & the emotions are greatly conveyed. Hiding the pain with smiles is so difficult but our loved ones will somehow read them! Wonderfully written :)

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    1. Thanks Anand and welcome back. There are very few readers like you who can feel the written words and understand the inherent meaning of it. Good to see you back :)

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  59. A masterpiece....ur poems strike a chord.

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  60. Exactly as written above, your poems strike a chord!

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    1. Thank you dear, means a lot coming from you :)

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  61. nice one ..... :) I have a surprise for you. Check out my Blog http://saurabhchawla2345.blogspot.in/

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    1. Thank Saurabh for the comment and award...:) :) :)

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  62. Emotion ebbs and flows. Nice work!!!!

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  63. Brilliantly expressed full of emotions like always! Keep up the good work Saru :)

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  64. Yes.. Indifference hurts.... Well expressed...

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    1. It surely does and thanks for reading.

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  65. Beautiful poem Saru...Silence is the strongest language!

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    1. It is if one can understand. Thanks for liking the poem.:)

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  66. This is beautiful. Extremely so.

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  67. wow...so much said in so less...

    i hope for whosoever this is written is doing good and comes out of it as early as possible...

    regards
    rahul

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    1. Even I wish happiness for all. Thank God, this was a work of fiction. And thanks a ton for reading Rahul...:)

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  68. clarification and correction on behalf of Mr. Sekar
    I think he tried to translate the last 3 lines of your poem in TAMIL
    "I don't know how,
    If ever I have to write,
    How the word 'life' would spell..."
    BUT I'm sad to say that he has translated with more spelling mistakes in the language-TAMIL
    CONCLUSION:
    HE TRIED TO SAY THAT THOSE LINES ARE TOUCHING HIS HEART
    Nice presentation;keep it up

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    1. Thanks a ton for writing this comment. :)

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  69. Loved it, but I wish there were more lines..didn't like it to end..:)

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    1. Sometimes, I feel I should write long poems but I fail. Somehow, I feel comfortable in writing less words...Thanks for reading the poems and gracing this blog :)

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  70. <3 did nt want to stop reading, wanted it 2 just go on and on..

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    1. Even I feel a kind of connection with this poem and I want to read the pain of the protagonist. Thanks for reading Dipthi:)

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