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Monday, January 16, 2012

तन्हा


आग से धुले और पानी से जले है,
हम तो मरने से पहले भी कई बार मरे है !
तलाश थी जिस आरज़ू की अब तक,
आज भी तन्हा उसी राह पर खड़े है !
सौ बार किया मैंने उल्फत का बया,
ये दर्द उनके दिल तक न गया,
मेरी बर्बादी में उनके एहसान बड़े है,
आज भी तन्हा उसी राह पर खड़े है !
मैंने तय किया जिसके लिए शहरो का सफ़र,
उसने दो कदमो में किया मेरा प्यार दफन,
मेरी मौत के सामान मेरे सामने पड़े है,
आज भी तन्हा उसी राह पर खड़े है !
क्या आज वो रात होगी ?
ये ज़िन्दगी शायद अब मौत के बाद होगी...
मेरे अपने ही मेरी खुशियों से लडे है,
इसीलिए, आज भी तन्हा उसी राह पर खड़े है !

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217 comments:

  1. Liked the simplicity in this one...guess there are many shades of solitude that have been brought out by you..will term this as a emotional journey...nice read...you have made it a habit to write great stuff :)

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    1. I wrote this one when I was in 12th standard, night before my accountancy exam. Thank for an encouraging comment, Prayukth...:)

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  2. ये ज़िन्दगी शायद अब मौत के बाद होगी...
    मेरे अपने ही मेरी खुशियों से लडे है
    क्या बात है!बहुत सुंदर!

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  3. आपने तन्हा होने का दर्द खूबसूरती से अभिव्यक्त किया है.
    हर शब्द दिल की गहन टीस को प्रकट कर रहा है.
    कहने के लिए शब्द नही मेरे पास सारू
    आपकी काव्य प्रतिभा सच में कमाल की है.
    हिन्दी में आपकी प्रस्तुति पढकर बहुत ही खुशी मिली.
    बहुत बहुत आभार.

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    1. Thank you Sir for admiring the poem and for your comment:)

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    2. सारू ,आपकी हिन्दी बहुत अच्छी है.
      यदि आप टिप्पणियाँ भी हिन्दी में लिखने
      की कोशिश करे,तो और भी आनन्द आयेगा.

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    3. Sure Sir, will try. And, will ask Lady Fiona about translation...:)

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  4. Have to admit it's a great piece of emotional retreat..
    But I am not comfortable and left with uneasy feel.
    Saru! you deserve the credit.BOL

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    1. Sorry for the uneasy and uncomfortable feel, Sir. And, thanks a lot for your wishes and comment...

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  5. I ended up crying hopelessly after reading what you wrote! Probably that was a perfect dose of truth for my current state of mind!

    Thanks a ton for this one Saru!

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    1. Ah, I am sorry for that...You know how much I love the cheerful and happy Mi.
      Cheer up and smile:)

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  6. Lovely . aag se dhule paani se jale hain padhna achchha lagata agar ye hota mere pane meri khushiyon ke liye lade hain , kaash !!

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    1. Kaash...:) Thanks a lot for your comment, Sir:)

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  7. None can ever overtake the emoticons powers of Hindi:) Loved it :)

    Weakest LINK

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    1. True, Rachit. Hindi is such a beautiful language. Thanks for your comment!

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  8. Wish I could read Hindi :'( Even though I can't, I can never resist viewing the beauty of it's symbols ... stopping by to say hello :-)

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    1. That's so sweet of you. Believe me, hindi is a beautiful language and nothing can beat the charm of writing in your mother tongue.
      Thank you so much!

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    2. सारु,यदि आप अपनी हिन्दी कविता और मेरी हनुमान लीला
      की पोस्टों का कुछ अर्थ अंग्रेजी में Princesa Fiona जी को
      समझा पायें तो मुझे बहुत खुशी मिलेगी.

      आशा है आप मेरा अनुरोध स्वीकार करेंगीं.

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  9. Urdu and Hindi... two of the most b'ful languages in the world.

    In alfazon ki gehrai aseem hai. In alfazon ke dard ki gehrai anant hai.

    मेरे अपने ही मेरी खुशियों से लडे है,
    इसीलिए, आज भी तन्हा उसी राह पर खड़े है !

    Beautiful

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    1. True and both these languages are connected. Urdu is poetic. You write anything in Urdu and it fascinates you. Power of language, i will say.
      Thanks for admiring the poem. :)

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  10. beautiful saru.. very beautiful..
    loved it !!!

    raah par aaj tum tanha hi khade ho..
    par ye zindagi naaraaz tumse nahi,
    bas sirf aur do kadam ki hain duri,
    iss raah ke uss paar, zindagi fir khushiyon se hain bhari.. :)

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    1. Beautiful, thanks for these lovely and inspiring words. Truly magical...:)

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  11. It was just heart touching.. Hindi the most beautiful language on earth. And the words u hav used, its just amazing :) Hugs

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  12. Very touching Saru!I wish nobody has such a life.

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    1. I wish that too...Thanks for the comment Indu:)

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  13. great to see a hindi piece from u saru...very good work...bring in more of these...very soulful :)

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    1. Thank you Prateek...I love writing in hindi but I don't get readers. Still, I have vowed to post hindi poem once a month...:)

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  14. Waah saru singhal ji... Lajawab rachna apke dwara. Kafi achi likhi hai apne...
    I m very much pleased to read such a nice poem presented by u.

    Hindi has its own beauty... So keep writing.

    Regards,
    Ashish kumar

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    1. Thank you Ashish. Indeed, Hindi is a beautiful language. Will try posting more in hindi from now onwards...

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  15. I want to meet you soon Saru. I just want to meet you soon.

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    1. Me too...Me too...
      Teach me photography then...:)

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  16. sad ...

    Mann no taaan saari umar dhakhiyaan ne mariya
    Dushmana nu ki kahiye ithe taan apne sagiyaan ne maariya


    its always our own who ruin it for us

    Bikram's

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    1. It's always people who are close to your heart have the power to break it...Sad...

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  17. amazing lines saru...very beautiful poem...but too much pain!

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    1. I agree with the pain part but I wrote nothing this week. So, have to post something from my collection. Thanks for liking it, Rohit :)

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  18. Very simple ... I liked the line
    मेरी बर्बादी में उनके एहसान बड़े है, :)

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  19. Another beautiful poem - so soulful & simple.

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  20. nice! yeah standing alone,still waiting for you:) nice!

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    1. Thanks Stuti...BTW, where are you these days? No post since a long long time...

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  21. Saru, aap hindi mein bhi ultimate likhte ho....mazaa aa gaya padkar...

    hey how come i subscribed to your blog but still i didn't receive this post in email ...something's wrong again i believe...

    regards
    rahul

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    1. Thank you Rahul.
      Sorry, please try subscribing it by using 'Follow by email' widget. Hope that works...

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  22. I am fascinated by writings on Life / Death / cross-roads.. Imagine when all 3 come together.. Thats what has happened here Saru :)

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    1. You have great observation for words, Binu. Well, expected from a writer of your intellect.
      Thanks for the comment:)

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  23. Truly beautiful Saru! Painful, yet the way you expressed it was very soulful :)

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    1. Thanks a lot Harsha. Pain speaks a language of its own...

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  24. Why everyone is in so much pain under the beautiful sky today?
    Perhaps we all know the answer but not daring to admit it.
    But if the pain is the fuel of the creativity then it must remain as it is.
    Wish you all the best Saru.

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    1. I wish no one suffers any sort of pain but that's not possible. We all have our share of sorrows. And, pain brings the best in any writer. Thanks a lot for your comment Dip:)

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  25. english mein to aap ne puri blogger janta ko kabze mein kiya hua hai...ab hindi mein tehelka... :D

    मेरी बर्बादी में उनके एहसान बड़े है, ye padh kar bas..maza aa gaya...

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    1. Nothing like that, Kunal. There are many who write way better than me which includes you as well. Thanks for appreciating my work always...:) :) :)

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  26. Saru, yaar........hindi main aur likha kar.....bahut hi maza aya!! I would rate this the highest to date....Masterpiece this <3

    *hugs*

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    1. Thanks Chintan, you know I wrote this when I was in 12th standard. I am planning to post one hindi poem in a month...:)

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  27. I loved this, I somehow think, no other language expresses unrequited love quite the way Hindi does. Great work, as usual!!

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    1. Thank you Meera, I agree with you completely...:)

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  28. Good to see your experise in Hindi language tooo......

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  29. jst gr888888..vry touchng!!
    aapke ye alphaaz humaare dil chu gye hai,
    tanha se mausam me hum or tanha ho gye hain,
    in lafzo se zakhm-e dil phir hare ho gye hain..
    jo keh na paaye hum ,aapne wo dard in shabdo me piroye haine

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    1. That was beautiful...:) And, thanks for writing such a beautiful comment. You just made my day...:)Thank you!

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  30. strange that while reading this, a beautiful track is playing in the background on radio. अँधेरी दास्तान, खो गए कहाँ, हम तो रह गए फिर वहीँ ...

    Nice read.


    Cheers,
    Blasphemous Aesthete

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    1. Looks like a soulful song...Thanks for the comment Anshul!

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  31. Great when you write in Hindi.. poem was so nice n touching but I personally want that Saru poem character in the climax should be moving...instead standing alone...its like depressing feeling n character do not want to move ahead...so don't create anything which make other Devdas...Forgive me if I exceeded my limit...:)

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    1. Right, we should end on a happy note. Will keep that in my mind. No need to be sorry Mithlash. It's always good to hear what you say...Thanks!!!

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  32. This is awesome!! you'r as good in hindi poems as English...but that was expected..language doesn't matter much when one has the craft.loneliness and pain in this is profound.

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    1. Speechless after reading your comment...All I can say is - Thank you!

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  33. it was an absolute pleasure reading this one esp coz it was in Hindi and because the way you described the emotions very moving
    will look forward to more of your hindi poems

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    1. Thanks a lot Sujatha...I will write more in Hindi from now onwards.

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  34. raah pe tanha ruke ho kyun??
    thoda jo chalo toh paoge, sath dene waale baht khade hain..
    jo teri khushiyon se lade wo apne nahi paraye the..
    apne toh teri ek khushi ke liye ghamon ke aage patthar se ade hain..
    raah pe tanha ruke ho kyun??
    thoda jo chalo toh paoge, sath dene waale baht khade hain..

    Naice poetry :)

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    1. True, those who fight are not close ones...We always need a positive outlook towards life. Lovely lines and thanks for your comment...:)

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  35. What a soulful piece.Loved every bit of it. Agreed. Your hindi poems are as beautiful or maybe even more...:)

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    1. Thanks a lot Madhusha, hindi poems are indeed very charming...:)

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  36. Saru jee,

    I read it once - felt it was dark. I read once again - felt it was more than just dark. It was deep, the feelings are very intense & deep... And you have expressed them
    B-E-A-U-T-I-F-L-L-Y!! Loved it...

    P.S: My Hindi as in writing is poor than my English.. so, have commented in English only :)

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    1. You know even I am not that fond of this poem. I love the beginning of it. Thanks for liking it Sunil. You know when you write at 17 you just like playing with lovely sounding words...

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  37. Lovely....love the simple words used to describe loneliness.

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  38. visited ur blog many times, never understood anything :D. this time i came here with a mission and mission accomplished. it was a delight going through this poem. no wonder u r everyone's favorite blogger.

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    1. I always feel poetry has many interpretations. So, choose any when you read next time or just admire the play of words. Favorite blogger...I'm not sure of it...But, feels good when you are with great people. Blogging is such a platform...Thanks for liking it and for your nice words:)

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  39. Wow, very well framed. Just love it.

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  40. sorry i dont know hindi...but i read it with the help of translator... i understand what u write...but only little bit.. congrats keep writing..

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    1. Thanks Sekar, you are so kind to read my work...:)

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  41. So painfully touching! Saru.. you have your way with words in every language. :) True genius.

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    1. Thanks Raj...I wish I can write in French. It's such a smooth language...

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    2. I am sure you will be able to. You have a thing for languages and words. And French is an easy language. :)

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    3. Thanks Raj but French is extremely difficult.

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    4. No Saru.. Trust me. It isnt that difficult. I learnt it in school and I have found it relatively easy. But understanding French people speak is a totally different thing though. ;)

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    5. I will give it a shot. Lets see how much I can learn...:) :) :)

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  42. Simple beautifully penned... :-)

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  43. Kya baat hai.. aaj bhi uss raah pe khade hain!

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  44. It was simple and beautiful.
    Great work by a 12std girl :))

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  45. I've always like reading hindi works, cause I've myself never been god at it :)
    It was lovely :)

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    1. Even I am not so at it. I try to scribble beautiful sounding words. Thanks for liking it.

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  46. I really admire ppl who can write so well in Hindi. :)

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  47. Kya kahu....bahut sunder ya bahut hi dard bhari....magic of our mother tongue.....and who said there are no readers for your Hindi poems.....
    MAIN HOO NA......Hahaha...Sharukh Khan style.Anyways Saru I really love your poems but one thing I just want to ask....Itni dukh bhari kavita kyu?

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    1. LOL...SRK...When Harsha is around, How can one not think of movies? Thanks a lot for the comment. I wrote this one many years back and posted to fill the space on blog...:)

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  48. Usually it is the last line of the poem that strikes you.. but this has a wonderful and catchy beginning. Loved it.

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    1. Even I love the beginning of it. Thanks a lot Farila. :)

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  49. Wah Saru ji Dil khus ho gaya apki ye poem padhke to......Ekdam Rapchick he.......!!

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  50. Khoobsoorat bayan ,lachari aur bebasi ka.

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    1. Thanks a lot Sir for appreciating it...

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  51. Saru...you are just too too too good :)
    Kya ehsaas hain iss poem mein..waah..am going to call you Ustaad Saru from now on :)

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    1. Pooja, everything else is fine but where is Bow-Tie? Call me as you like but please post it soon. Then, I will be thankful to you...:)

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  52. what to say..simply too Good !!

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  53. सौ बार किया मैंने उल्फत का बया,
    ये दर्द उनके दिल तक न गया,
    मेरी बर्बादी में उनके एहसान बड़े है,
    bahut khoob
    really nice
    following ur blog

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    1. Thanks a lot Chirag for your comment...:) You are welcome here:)

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  54. Whow... Really Heart touching poem, totally expressing your lonliness while writing this words... Awesome... :)

    I'm Waiting For You

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  55. wah wah wah wah..!!!!kya khub likha hein aapne..janab.....!!!!
    awesoommee :)

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  56. मेरी बर्बादी में उनके एहसान बड़े है
    such an awesome line...and brilliant composition...
    how can you be so beautiful while being so brief?

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    1. Being brief is so easy. Write few lines and make it rhyme. Challenge is to write anything beyond 100 words. I can't do it. Thanks for your compliment dear:)

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  57. each line is so meaningful and perfect. Believe me, your words always touches deep in my heart... Love you Saru ! :)

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    1. Thanks a ton Kitty. You are such a sweetheart...:)

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  58. Verse laden with pathos.."Aaj bhi tanha usi raha pe khade hain".. One who as felt this pain can only understand its depth.. Congrats

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    1. Thanks a lot... Only a poet can understand the profoundness of the poem and dig on it...

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  59. *speechless*
    and you wrote this in CLASS 12???????
    and you say you're NOT A GENIUS???
    kya bolun... i have no words..
    ये ज़िन्दगी शायद अब मौत के बाद होगी...
    this wa sincredible... INCREDIBLE :)

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    1. Kriti, I have told you my crappy theory. It's like that. Thanks for liking it. Again, I am not a genius.

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  60. आग से धुले और पानी से जले है,
    हम तो मरने से पहले भी कई बार मरे है !
    तलाश थी जिस आरज़ू की अब तक,
    आज भी तन्हा उसी राह पर खड़े है !.........behad khubsurat .....bahut sunder prastuti ki hai . dard bhi dikh raha hai .........saru shabd nahi hai kuch kahane ke liye . dil ko chu lene wali gahari , uttam abhivyakti .
    saru tum hindi poem bahut khoobsurti se likhti hoo . dil ke karib .
    ek gujarish hai hindi poem ko bhi apne shabdo me dhala karo . aaj ki rachna feel ka eahsas deti hui . ........behad sunder .

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    1. Your words mean a lot as they come from a seasoned poet like you. Sure, will post often in hindi from now on. Thanks Shashi for your comment:)

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  61. WOW! Love it!

    Love
    http://www.meghasarin.blogspot.com

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  62. its fantastic indeed... so simply u have expressed the emotions which is incomparable... i m speechless...

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  63. Everytime I return to your blog, I discover exceptional works!

    Once again... Fantastic!

    Mohur
    http://mohur.blogspot.com

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    1. Thanks a lot Mohur for a generous comment...

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  64. I'm not sure what it says, but the photo is cool! I really love the way the font looks as well.

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    1. Thank you Alissa, it's about losing your love and standing where he left you...

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  65. Wow!,Simple yet Fabulous blend of words expressing emotions. Luv it Saru!.Great one at that Age!.

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  66. सारु,

    तन्हाई की क्या बात कही, हर कोई तनहा हैं
    कहने को तो भीड़ मैं खडे, पर आँगन सूना हैं
    परायो का क्या, वोह तो पराये हैं
    यह अपने ही तो हैं, जो हाथ छुडा जाते हैं
    दामन पकड़, वोह दामन ही जला जाते हैं
    जो तुमने तय की दूरियां उनसे मिलने को
    नासमझ थे, यह दो कदम ही फासले बड़ा जाते हैं

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    1. Beautiful and profound lines. Thanks for writing a beautiful piece here...:)

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    2. Thanks Saru...actually u have inspired me to turn these few lines into a proper poem...may be one of these days I will write more and complete it and publish on my blog.

      it's always a pleasure to read a good piece of work and then put your own emotions and wordings in them

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  67. Excellent Saru, from this quality of Poetry to Lyrics is a small jump, hope to see you soon on this side of the divide too...

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    1. I feel humbled and speechless. Thank you Sir...:)

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  68. मेरी मौत के सामान मेरे सामने पड़े है,
    आज भी तन्हा उसी राह पर खड़े है !

    This is the best 2 lines i liked from your poem. I am reading Hindi after a really long time and it was a pleasure reading your simple poetry.

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  69. its good...lines will connect to many people in this world...who live their lives in the grey area.......

    they will find a partner in this post..

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    1. True, they will associate with it. Thank you Chetan...

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  70. awesome post and very nice composition

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  71. It was too good saru di. Too good. I was flying on my bed as I read it till the end. :) Hindi has immense beauty. And you showed it well. :)

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    1. Aww...That's so sweet of you Anshul...Thanks :)

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  72. wow Saru ji...you made my day...
    i loved each and every line of the poem..
    hindi poems are rare to find with such soulfulness..
    gr88 work once again

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    1. Thanks a lot Ankit. Your comment made my day...:)

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  73. Wow a poem in Hindi! Totally impressed. Why do we wait for someone..I am reminded of the Hindi song picturized on Ashok Kumar "Tum beseharaa hoon to kisi ka sahara bano, tumko apne aap sahara mil jayega".

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    1. The song is lovely and goes well with this poem. And, thanks for the comment...:)

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  74. बहुत ही ऊंदा शब्दों में आपने एक टूटे हुए दिल की पीड़ा बयान की है. लेकी कभी कभी दिल टूटने पर भी हम वही गलतियाँ करने के लिए तैयार रहते है, ये आशा लिए की अगली दफा दास्तान कुछ और होगी. कई लोग इसे पागलपन कहते है, लेकिन इन मामलो में आशावादी होने का एक अलग ही मज़ा होता है:)

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    1. True...I love your hindi...I just love the way you write comments in hindi...Thanks:)

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  75. Thank you so much for the comment :) Looking forward to your next post :)

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  76. वाह, बहुत उम्दा!

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  77. Hi Saru,
    First time visiting your blog. Awesome poem - couldnt resist myself in jotting down these lines. Thanks! - Celina

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    1. That's so nice of you Celina. Thanks and welcome here...:)

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  78. है कहानी शायद ये किसी के तन्हाई की,
    या फिर उसकी खुशियों से जुदाई की.
    या फिर अपने शब्दों में तुमने किया है बयाँ,
    अंदर छुपे दर्द की गहराई की...

    I felt very connected to this poem. When some unknown reader reads you and feels connected, it means you have done fantastic job with words. B'ful poem. *superlike*

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    1. Thank you so much Brajmohan...I'm truly honored by your comment...:)

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  79. बहुत खूब...क्या बात है !

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    1. बहुत ही सुंदर भावपूर्ण अभिव्यक्ति...

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  80. सौ बार किया मैंने उल्फत का बया,
    ये दर्द उनके दिल तक न गया,
    मेरी बर्बादी में उनके एहसान बड़े है,

    वाह! आपने बड़ी ही सहजता से अपनी बात कह दी|

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    1. Thank you for reading Satish and for your comment!

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  81. Simple and meaningful...last three lines absolutely brilliant.

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