Lost Abode

I liked everything to be perfect,
Until one day I found.
Some poems don’t rhyme,
Some words don’t weigh,      
And some smiles always fade.
Unlike some happy faces,
These lips are now closed.
Drowned in the flood of tears,
They lost their abode.
Can I curse him?
For leaving me in the lurch.
Without even saying a word,
Abandoned me in this never ending search.
A plateau of concrete,
Has his name with 'dates.'
Symphonies created by his memory,
Play low-key on my fate.
Each morning I bathe myself,
Then walk bare-feet, muddling my toes.
Inching towards my place of solace,
I decorate his name with a rose.

*Based on a story of a war widow and is published in the book 'Rousing Cadence'


Comments

  1. I liked everything to be perfect,
    Until one day I found.

    The way u started itself was explosion of creativity

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  2. Enjoyed reading a poem from you after many days.

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  3. This is definitely one of your better poems....very good Saru...Keep it up

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  4. Emotional. Congratulations.

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  5. "Symphonies created by his memory,
    Play low-key on my fate."
    How amazing are you Saru?!

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  6. Best rhyming I have come across ever. Including my posts :P

    They sing a melody your words!

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  7. This post has been selected for the Tangy Tuesday Picks this week. Thank You for an amazing post! Cheers! Keep Blogging :)

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  8. It is beautiful Saru, the poem talks of words not rhyming in a beautiful rhyme, and oh, the angst, when they don't as life unfolds!

    Beautiful poem :)

    Blasphemous Aesthete

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  9. i don't know what to say!! there is a knot and lump in my throat which refuses to go......

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  10. Wow you brought out the emotions well!

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  11. There are no adjectives for this one, just that it warmed my heart to the core.

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  12. Beautiful portrayal of loss, love and sadness. This one will stick in the memory for a long time... why not try it in Hindi also?

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  13. Oh wow! Beautiful poetry! Unfurls in the most subtle manner

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  14. I could feel the pain while reading. So beautifully written.

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  15. Very well written, Saru! Sad and painful.

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  16. Emotions captured perfectly through subtle lines...that's great !

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  17. Great one! I loved it so much!

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  18. Loved every lines ...well done Saru!

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  19. Superb imagination. Very carefully crafted lines.

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  20. that's magic with words,truly exceptional

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  21. have no idea about is the best you have written .. but can surely say this one is the best i have read out of your pen :)

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  22. Lovely poem. Coincidentally, in the last 2 weeks, I have seen 5 departures - family members of my colleagues, one in my housing society. Some departures just needs to be accepted. Cant blame anyone..

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  23. This book has equal dosage of love, romance, adventure, depression and nice Haikus. You've showcased one or two bits of this in those wonderful words.

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  24. @Everyone - Thanks for reading. Touched by your feedback.

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  25. A plateau of concrete,
    Has his name with 'dates.'
    Symphonies created by his memory,
    Play low-key on my fate.
    Each morning I bathe myself,
    Then walk bare-feet, muddling my toes.
    Really touching words

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  26. Dear,Saru

    I was going through your some of your poems and I found them amazing. You are a very good writer.

    I'm an aspiring new blogger, and it so happen that I also write some poems, I have a blog of mine @ http://starlitoctave.wordpress.com I would be glad if you can give me some tips on how to be better writer.

    Thank you
    Sam

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