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Monday, September 16, 2013

Less Words...


Poem, words, love
Breathing your love,
I want to master the art.
With less words,
How to occupy your heart?

I thought for many nights,
Under cloudless sky conniving with stars.
Intoxicated with your love,
Even the striking of clock sounds like guitar.

Neither I can play with words,
Nor I can weave a fable.
I get goose bumps on my body,
When we sit across the table.

You're a man of few words,
But, I'm little loquacious.
Fearing my utterance of useless words,
Project me as flirtatious.

So, the less words I want,
Can you help me, please?
Or else I'll say love you,
Every time I breathe.

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141 comments:

  1. blabbering out is a fear of many..
    sometimes in nervousness we utter out nonsense..
    that feeling of finding Just Right Words.. is universal..

    beautiful poem Saru !!

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    1. I know, just the right words doesn't happen often.

      Thanks for reading the poem, Jyoti.

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  2. The last two lines are so beautiful. Feel a bit sad for her as she is generous with her words and he is stingy.

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    1. Yeah, he should open up a bit and stop being miser at words. Thanks for reading Kalpana.

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  3. So very beautiful! He better act out the part.

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  4. Simply good! you are a rock star of poetry!!! :)

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    1. Hehehe...Thank you for a generous comment Raj. :)

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  5. Lovely :) The last four lines means a lot ! Liked it much :)

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  6. A lovely 'love' poem. I enjoyed reading it.

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  7. Wow what a parody of love! Saru, the words never fail you no matter in what measure you use them:)

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    1. Thank you so much Sir. Your comment just made my day.

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  8. Saru, it's so beautiful! Congrats!

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  9. BREVITY is important. I learned this the hard-way. Once, I used to write 1200-1800 word posts in my blog and was wondering why no one came to read them :P

    Since can mask our ignorance, but our ignorance will seldom allow us to be silent :P

    Destination Infinity

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    1. I meant, Silence can mask our ignorance... !

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    2. Brevity is indeed very important. Silence has many dimensions. Thanks for reading.

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  10. Very beautiful and soulful ! LOved the last two lines

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  11. Wouldn't it be an amazing match, the one with few words and the brevity of his words completed by the garrulous one.

    Cute post there, the last emotion was the most beautiful.

    Cheers,
    Blasphemous Aesthete

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    1. Yeah, kinda similar to Jab We Met.

      Thanks for reading Anshul.

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  12. Its not easy controlling our tongues especially when we belong to the 'Out of control' category :D Lovely!

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  13. Last two lines!! WOW! Beautiful!

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  14. Lovely poem, the last two lines makes it even more lovable.

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  15. Sweet poem!
    Enjoyed reading the ending lines, such a sweet blackmail :D

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  16. hmmm...most of the times, it happens. Less words from one...
    The 'love you' will definitely make them spill out a few golden words though. :-)

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    1. These are magic words. Thanks for reading, Rekha.

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  17. Saru perhaps it is the mystery of the few words spoken or words not spoken that attracts. To each his own...we struggle to make these changes where few words are used but i have given up on that quest because for me words are still not enough.
    Personally i am more comfortable with those who possess finesse in their words even when they are many as compared to those who won't speak much or say much in words. Prem kee abhivyakti honee chahiyay...shabdon se aur agar shabd nahin hain tab vyavhaar say...

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    1. Last line said it all and thanks for sharing your lovely thoughts. It will stay with me...

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  18. Using the right words and expressing one's love with the right intensity is an art. Anything less or more will create adverse effects :)

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    1. Indeed...Welcome back Prasanna, good to see you again.

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  19. That's so sweet... :) A very lovely and lyrical poetry.

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  20. Nice one Saru...i can relate to that sitting on the other side...

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    1. Hmmm...So you are the less talkative types. :)

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  21. wow Saru --every word breathes romance ---great one

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  22. Simple but sentimental and touching poem.

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  23. :)You could let those eyes talk. ;)
    But people don't say enough 'I love yous' Only 3 words there, you can keep saying that, Saru. :)

    I hope you are having a good week. :)

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    1. Yeah, that's a good and romantic idea Dee. You too have a great week and take care :)

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  24. beautiful composition..ur vocabulary is simply excellent..loved the last four lines

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  25. wowww...the constant pondering that goes on in your mind when you are in Love...you have so much to express, but perhaps words would not do enough justice to what you feel. lauvvedd it :)

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    1. Yeah, words fail us that time. Thanks for a lovely comment Jiggyasa.

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  26. Wow....the last stanza was really awesome :D

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  27. Lovely word Saru, as usual. This one so nicely mirrors the angst of a person who feels she talks too much..Retrospective regrets are so common among those who love to talk but alas are also introspective.

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    1. Very true. Thanks for reading and for a lovely comment.

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  28. T poem is just beautiful Saru....great job. I only wonder if there could be anything a "Correct words" as we all have our own perceptions and what is right for me can be wrong for others.
    I have experienced it many times....people hear what I never said and never hear what I keep saying again and again. :-)

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    1. Yeah, that happens all the time. Somehow, who know us and understand us without even saying much.

      Thanks for reading.

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  29. I think you answered at the end, '"....Love you/every time i breathe" what an inspiration for me too before I go out to the hills for my work. Very nice.

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  30. Brevity is indeed a rare talent. Nicely put. The last two lines were spectacular :)

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  31. OMG this was amazing...In my case I am the one who keeps quiet, and he keeps talking...Lesser the words means more he talks :)

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    1. That is so so sweet, same is with my husband. I can't forget how much he talked and wiped his sweat when he came to meet my mother for the first time.

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  32. I see the interplay of two interesting characters aptly brought out...lovely!

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  33. wow! so nice composition. Less words always nice :)

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  34. You tend to explore strange and unseen aspects of love through your poetry...truly a gift!

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  35. Loved the ending. It made me remember these lines from one of my poems-

    हर साँस-साँस तुम्हारा ख़याल
    हर धड़कन तुम्हारी आरज़ू,
    कैसे संभालूं यह मन के ज़ज्बात
    तुम शब्द नहीं मेरे, बस आत्मा की जुस्तजू!

    The beloved is in every breath, love is in the air, I am intoxicated and blind for you. Ever I breath, I breathe you and your name...

    Words r less when the love is more. Don't worry...just keep breathing.

    Read this full poem of mine here-
    http://guptashaifali.blogspot.com/2012/02/i-love-you-should-i-say-it-today.html

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    1. Yeah, that is true, words fail us when we are in love. Beautiful lines from your poem and thanks for sharing your lovely thoughts with us, Shaifali.

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  36. Well composed and it really stands out. Good work keep it up.

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  37. Beautiful lines Saru and so true -- your words just touched my soul.

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  38. Saru, I guess men are not good at speaking their heart out (my feeling - I might be wrong).. And especially when it comes to romantic moments.. So, I can understand the guy's loss of words in the situation mentioned in your poem :)

    But, how can you churn out wonderful poems so frequently? Awesome yaar..

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    1. Binu, that was quite a defense :P

      And thanks for your appreciation, means a lot coming from you.

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  39. Beautiful poem! Opposites attract each other. :)

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    1. It sure does. Thanks for reading, Gayatri.

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  40. wow.. so romantic Saru... :-) Beautiful....

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  41. nice piece of writing after ;ong time here keep writing

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  42. Wow...lovely poem liked reading it.....good topic

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  43. WOW is the right word... and I often(almost always) blabber...

    Madhavi

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    1. Me too...:) Specially in front of my husband.

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  44. ah...I loved it :D really pretty :p :D :D

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  45. saying the right words at the right time is indeed an art form i think,specially people like me, who rush with words from the heart.Lovely words.

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    1. I guess, most women will feel like you.
      Thank you for reading, Nima.

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  46. just what soul needs. nice & lovely in its own ways. good wishes. keep reading & sharing :-)

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  47. Firstly, heartfelt appreciation for this wonderful poem.Secondly, there is absolutely no need of any words to understand and express Love. If the feelings are loquacious(from both sides), it is fathomable. Words are just a formality then which comes by without much thoughts.
    Either our thoughts and feelings be loquacious or our words and in this case the former is preferable.
    Your title says it all..:)

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    1. Yes, you are right and between all that, we write a poem. Thanks for a lovely comment.

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  48. I'll say love you,Every time I breathe.
    Wow what a deep thought. Even I firmly believe that if there is a heart to heart connection between two persons then words are not required there. Your expressions can convey your message to that person directly...

    It remind me of one Hindi Movie named "Koshish" starring Sanjeev Kumar and Jaya Bhaduri. Which has been considered a landmark movie in the history of Indian cinema. It proves that No Words are required to express your love to someone.

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    1. Love needs no medium. It is self sufficient. Thanks for reading and for a lovely comment.

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  49. What a beautiful poem! I have become your fan. Keep it up.

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