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Monday, July 2, 2012

Wailing Woes


On her frail shoulders,
the threads of Pashmina talk.
Of a valley, of heaven,
of a moonlit night.
Demure, she froze
amidst the discordant noise,
Charred bodies around her,
her flesh and blood died.
On moonlit nights, hence
she walks barefoot on the snow,
Suffering within and out,
I can listen,
what her silence speaks out loud.
Deranged, Demented,
She drags her body around,
Unaware, Listless,
what she has lost can never be found.
I call for her,
whenever she passes by me,
I have been piling up sorrows as debris.
Come! My child
Let me hear your pain,
Let me soothe your wounds,
Let me jostle your soul,
So you shed a tear.
I know your pain,
I have done all this myself,
And I have been there.

This poem narrates the sufferings of women who lost their families in Kashmir Valley.
*Disclaimer - Title is inspired by Sonnet 30 of Shakespeare.
**Image Source - Here


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154 comments:

  1. beautiful..the end is heart touching!

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  2. Losing people, blood shed, pain.. It all must be so so scary and devastating for the people experiencing it all.
    You penned the emotions and the picture very well!

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    1. Yes it is, only those who go through all this can narrate it, I just tried. Thanks for liking my effort...

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  3. One of the beautiful poem I've read in times. Every line speaks for itself. Loved it! :)

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    1. Glad you liked it Leo. Thanks for reading!

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  4. I must agree with Leonardo...really heart touching poem.

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  5. Wonderful poem . . .

    A award is waiting for you. Check out here -
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    Ashwini

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    1. Thank you so much for reading and for the award. :) :) :)

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  6. touching poem Saru.. Loved it..

    Someone is Special

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  7. Thank you Saru for taking up such issues to write on. Your are using your great reach to very good effect. Really applaud your efforts in this regard. This poem is very beautiful and touching indeed. :)

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    1. Akshay, I wish I could reach more people out there. BTW, the poem I wrote on Ansari is very popular. I get many hits/comments on it till date.

      Thanks for reading and liking it.:)

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  8. Very touching and emotional words Saru. Each words has a deeper meaning, talks the grief of every individual who lives in Kashmir, and have lost their loved ones!

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  9. I could feel a deep pain in my heart which hummed in tune with your verses. There was a deep emotional connect through which I could feel the pain and suffering for a moment and it made my heart so heavy. Very touchingly written and dripping with emotion, moved me beyond description!

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    1. Raj your comments are more beautiful than my posts. I feel as if someone has written the gist in the comment section. Thank you so much:)

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  10. So touching,. Keep sharing..:) I always love your poem Saru..:)

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  11. Pain expressed with sensitivity. Lovely

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  12. Full of emotions and very touching poem.
    Your writing skills are excellent.

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    1. Thank you more a motivating comment Sir:)

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  13. Saru, this is a real poignant one for someone whose suffering is endless! Beautiful writing!

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  14. One can feel the pain of those women in your touching words Saru.

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    1. Glad that I am able to evoke those feelings. Thanks Mak!

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  15. soulful! saru.... humans are really emotionally bonded; well expressed! :)keep smiling always!

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  16. I thought you were writing about Afghan women. Kashmir. Similar stories of pain...deep and sad.

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    1. Yeah, same story and same pain. Thanks for reading dear:)

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  17. That was so touching. I love the way you composed it with such clear images of words...

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    1. Thanks a lot for a beautiful comment Simran:)

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  18. Now that is what I was talking about. There is just so much about the world that needs to be talked about- other than teenage Bollywood-inspired infatuations and here, you have done just that. The very idea of writing on something as stark as the woes of real,worldly people accords you my utmost respect Saru ! Keep that up :)

    It is difficult to put myself in the shoes of the woman here- that because I have lived in a fairly stable atmospher and also because... well because I am a guy. I could never have been able to write this piece- not in 1000 tries. So, thank you ! Its truly magnificent :)

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    1. Tatsat I want to write on such issues and at the same time I need to have variety on the blog. I write whenever I feel strongly about an issue. Glad you liked it this time. And even being a female I can never understand what these women went through. It was just an effort to write on something I strongly feel...

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  19. "what she has lost can never be found", it's indeed such a pain to lose your loved ones.....nicely quoted

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  20. Poignant and soul stirring! Very beautifully written, Saru! :) And heartiest CONGRATULATIONS on your Lakme win! Way to go :)

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    1. Welcome back Arti. Thanks for your wishes and for reading :)

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  21. Awesome! Was speechless initially! Really captured the essence there! Well written!

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  22. Such troubles these women have bored. The poem depicts that pain.

    Sonnet 30, a tribute to a friend and sch a wonderful tribute!

    On a different note, very interested now in reading all about the sonnets :-)

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    1. You should read Robert Frost and Shakespeare. And thanks for reading Jenny :)

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  23. Amazing expressions Saru! Very Poignant..this is one of your best poems in the recent past.

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    1. I think, Into the Ganges...is the best. How do you like that?

      Thanks for liking it :)

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  24. wonderful and very touchy..made my eyes moist..

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    1. Glad to know that these words are so powerful. Thanks for reading and welcome here:)

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  25. Superb poem.. A story ,a dance of words it is. hats off to ur imagination...#inspired

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    1. Thanks a lot for such a lovely comment:)

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  26. Very touching Saru. You know what I love best about your work...Its simple yet touching...No too-complex words or imagery....Loved it :)

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    1. Thank you Jaishree. Many say that my work is too simple but glad that a writer like you appreciates my style of writing. :) :) :)

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  27. very well written mam... the end is fantastic...
    the way you have depicted the pain is really a masterpiece type of creation...

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  28. beautiful and very moving!!

    http://styledestino.blogspot.com

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  29. It's so beautiful and sad, touched my heart.

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  30. sad and touching.liked the flow of words and the feel of the poem

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  31. So poignant...wonderful composition Saru!:)

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  32. Beautifully written! Touching!
    Sia
    http://itswhereiscribble.wordpress.com/

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  33. feeling oozing out wid words///

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  34. There were a hundred times I thought of writing on Kashmir.. but I thought no words can match their grief. But you proved me wrong Saru.. this was one great work!

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    1. You made my day with this comment Haritha. Thank you!

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  35. What a wonderful tribute..so poignant..and soulful!

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  36. Very nicely and wisely you explained the pain, sorrow, grief of a women who lost her dear and near one in the valley. And I liked this "Let me hear your pain,
    Let me soothe your wounds,
    Let me jostle your soul,
    So you shed a tear."
    Tears have the potential to heal any wound of the soul.
    Overall very wisely written:)

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    1. True, shedding them gives you a little relief. Thanks for reading Mithlash:)

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  37. beautiful.....heart touching....

    thanks saru jee

    regards

    anu

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  38. It seems you were able to put yourself in the shoes of the woman you spoke of. How else can one describe or even identify the thoughts going on inside her head. That's quite an ability :)

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    1. Thank you so much, your comment is very motivating.

      Welcome here:)

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  39. i really could visualise the women of kashmir... it was like a discription of a painting!!!

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    1. WOW, that was a beautiful comment! Thanks Sahi:)

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  40. one of those poems where you feel a million things after reading it but cannot express it in words. very masterful.

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    1. Thank you Subhorup, your comment made my day!

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  41. When I read word 'Pashmina', I thought many more such words related to plot will come in poem; May be you could hve wrote it much better from the point of view of victims.Still it's a great poem on humanity. Nice picture too. Good one Saru :)

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    1. Couldn't understand Deepak, the association of word with the victims point of view. Please explain. The poem is written from a victim's point of view, how she feels when she sees another victim. :)

      Thanks for reading it :)

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    2. Saru; some words Pashmina, Valley, Snow etc. were started to create a complete picture of the Kashmir and there was sort of plot created by you in some lines, which suddenly disappeared. Just a thought from the point of storyteller :))

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    3. I have to agree when someone who writes beautifully on Kashmir says so...:)

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  42. It is difficult to express someone else's pain so completely & poignantly as you have done.

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  43. Touching, and beautifully written indeed Saru. I just wish I'd write like you someday.

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    1. You write brilliantly Mani. You have your own style. Thanks for reading and for your lovely comment.

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  44. that was touching Saru hope the people responsible for the acts get to read this

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  45. deep malencholy portrayed beautifully ....touches the heart ...!!
    loved ur writing....!!

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    1. Thank you so much Anupama and welcome here:)

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  46. That was really soulful!!

    I have recently came back after a long vacation at Kashmir...although the valley is peaceful now but one can can ever wipe the tears of those who lost their loved one's !!

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    1. Sad to know that and we are helpless. Thanks for reading dear and sharing your experiences.

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  47. It is really hard for us to even imagine the pain of those who have experienced it.. Hope they get the strength to move ahead.. Nicely expressed Saru-jee..

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    1. I hope so too...Thanks for reading Sunil...

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  48. Being the daughter of that land, I have seen the situation myself. It leaves you numb and hollow. Behind all the smiling faces, there several tears that are shed for their loved ones.!

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    1. Oh! That's heart wrenching... I wish we could do something about it.

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  49. touchy.. poignant.. verrry nice, liked it.. :)

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  50. Very nice, portrays the emotions so well.

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  51. The loss,the heartache,expressed beautifully .

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  52. I have goosebumps as I read this right now...it is so beautiful and touching as the pain comes out so evidently.

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    1. Glad that my expression evoked those feelings in you. Thanks for reading!

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  53. your words always drops me into your created world in the posts

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  54. a sorrow filled tale,
    the pain and the loss of the women of the valley resonate..

    very well written Saru..

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  55. You have an amazing way with words, Saru!

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    1. Thank you so much Rachna and it means a lot coming from you.:)

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  56. Such a touching poem Saru. The pain of losing a loved one always leaves a very deep impact on the heart and in today's world it is really tough to find someone who would say, Come and talk to me, share your sorrows. Totally moved by the poem!

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    1. True, to get a shoulder to cry on is a blessing for some sort. Thanks for reading and Ashwini...

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  57. This one is so poignant, so sorrowful.

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  58. heart touching poem .. so beautiful !

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  59. Amazing poem Saru! :) When something happens that's so not planned, the hurt / sadness stays on forever!

    It deserves to be one of the top posts as awarded by blogadda..

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    1. I agree on both the statements. :) Welcome back Binu :)

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  60. Let me hear your pain,
    Let me soothe your wounds,
    Let me jostle your soul,
    So you shed a tear.

    Sukh baante ni badhta hai, dukh baatne se ghat'ta hai. No advice, no promise, sometimes all you need is someone to listen to you.

    It takes a lot of courage to shed a tear, to accept the sense of loss which has dismantled your inner self.

    I have done all this myself.
    Why does he do so? I have heard this question many a times from atheists and I never have a second opinion to it and I end up beating around the bush.

    Loved the poem from beginning to end :) Do read Sanhita's poem too if you haven't.

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    1. That is true, at time we need a shoulder to lean on. In the poem, 'I have done all this myself' represents that the other lady has gone through all that in her life. She can understand and relate to the pain.

      Glad you liked it. There's nothing more rewarding than someone appreciating your work. I read her poem too. It was soul stirring.

      Thanks for reading :)

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  61. Saru di!! you beautifully 'pain'ted the feelings of the women living out there....it needs a lot of efforts to do that.

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  62. Soulful Saru :) Very touching and well written :)

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