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Monday, January 9, 2012

My Aphrodite


Don't do it,
Don't even try,
Seasons yearned for it,
What autumn just complied.
Don't you tuck,
Fallen hair behind...
Till the spring blows a whistle.
Till the summer harsh up a little.
Or else, you may allow
My fingers to tuck them in.
To be close to those perfect lips...
To feel the velvet of your skin...
To sing a song into your ear,
And light up the evening a bit.
Then, let the body do the talking
If only, you permit...

Stepping close I wonder,
Beauty so sublime.
Speaking only with her eyes,
She pauses time.

*Aphrodite is the greek goddess of love and beauty.
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108 comments:

  1. So exquisite! Just like Aphrodite....the goddess of love and beauty! Heart stirring beauty in these lines:)

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  2. I was the first one to comment! Yae....!!!!

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  3. Saru, *bends on her knees, with a bouquet of 100 roses* MARRY ME :D

    That's the best compliment I could give to the author :P, chalo bhaag chalein :D

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  4. Saru lovely lines...and the pic is too good.. kiska hai :P :P

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  5. wow! for the poem but more so for your aphrodite...you captured her essence beautifully. no wonder she is asking u to marry her.

    yeh mens log kyun hamare liye aise wale poems nai likhte! :((

    really beautiful tribute/dedication
    this must have been one of your most difficult poems or maybe the most easy. i don't know!

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  6. Woah..great yaar Saru..

    Arrey waah! Kya baat hain..Chintan tum toh famous ho gayee :)

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  7. Awesome saru .. Chintan is lucky one and dont deny her offer :) ... Every line is awesomeness

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  8. U have woven a delightful charm here...Chintan is so lucky to have these lovely words attributed to her pic :)) hats off..

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  9. No words to explain your beautiful poetry....:)

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  10. Sensual this was....and you chose the perfect picture for this~~

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  11. there is a guy i used to hear on tv...n he'd go...'shimply shuperb! dat ish great piece of work derr'

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  12. aphrodite's beauty- beautifully composed... :)

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  13. Wonderfully written! One of my favourites so far.

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  14. wow.. i sure would like to meet the aphrodite :)

    Bikram's

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  15. Amazing. beautifully described Aphrodite. :) <3

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  16. Hello Saru.
    Beauty all around.
    Lovely tribute to your Aphrodite. Beautiful photo too.
    Thanks for sharing & visiting. Always nice to hear from you.

    Take Me Under Your Special Wings

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  17. Saru, you created a perfect Aphrodite and no aphrodisiacs needed to fall in love with her after your description of the mesmerizing beauty!The image is equally haunting!

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  18. Finally she plays a muse in your work..! :)

    Done beyond all excellence..!

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  19. A flawless piece of work to go with a flawless photo...Saru..you never fail to amaze us...
    Fantastic words...one of your best.. :-)

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  20. so lovely poem Saru! :) I love it! :)Very inspiring! :)

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  21. Beautifully written. :) And a very nice picture to go with it too. :)

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  22. woow that is beautiful ..

    double woow for the picture :P

    rahul

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  23. Oh..i love this , so romantic dear !

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  24. When I saw the pic, I knew it was Chintan's!! And nice poem to go with it too!! :)

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  25. Beautiful words for a Beautiful face!!! lovely!!!

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  26. Again a 'greety' poem from your launch station..:)
    Real use of spatical & linguistic intelligence.
    Saru! its 'Lyre'-in Greek understanding, BOL

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  27. The poet and the muse,each more enchanting than the other!

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  28. very passionate.. soulful even... i loved this one... :)

    Take care and keep writing......

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  29. Beautifully written!mesmerizing and enchanting.The words are so craftily choosen...No doubt,you have an impressive vocabulary!

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  30. speaking only wid her eyes,
    she pauses time..

    im lost...
    ur words, put me in a different world.. :)

    really smooth.. :)

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  31. :) Soulful... Beautiful lines!

    Stepping close I wonder,
    Beauty so sublime.
    Speaking only with her eyes,
    She pauses time...

    Speechless! :) Sharing it with everyone I know..

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  32. Beautiful words, but I could not take my eyes away from the picture of Chintan, hehe:-)

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  33. Eloquent and wonderful! If you were a man seeking to please Aphrodite, I wonder if she could have denied such a pleasant proposal?

    Cheers,
    Blasphemous Aesthete

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  34. Awwww! Every line is lovely and soulful :) I read it over and over again. You expressed it so elegantly Saru. :):)

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  35. Saru, this is awesomeness personified....
    I'm transported back to my English Hons days, I swear.... :)
    Just loved the lines -
    Seasons yearned for it,
    What autumn just complied.
    Don't you tuck,
    Fallen hair behind...

    PS. Short of words here... and Yeah, Chintan - Lucky Damsel! :D

    Love,
    Indie :)

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  36. god. This reminds me of my highschool sweetheart. splendidly caught your thoughts in words.

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  37. How beautiful...I was wondering why this title - Aphrodite? And when I went through till the end, now I know it was the best title. :)
    Lovely poetry...:)

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  38. Wow!..What a compliment! Chintan must be pleased :)

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  39. I like the words and the picture both!

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  40. You wrote this? How amazing that is to me. I have a hard time putting words together in a sentence and LOOK AT YOU!!

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  41. A *lovely* Aphrodite in words and photo :) I especially liked the last verse!

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  42. Haah, you flattered everyone with your soul stirring words... No wonder Chintan is asking you to marry :)

    I just can't pick one line as my favorite... Every word and every line in this poem is making me awww!!!

    A BIG thanks for writing such admiring poems every time! :)

    Cheers,
    Anand.

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  43. What a beautiful poem.. I think all girls would love to be appreciated this way!
    Chintan, Super Kismat gurl, tumhari :D

    Keep it up up and uppp.. Saru.. Hugs!

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  44. Wow!! Thats a lovely poem. And chintan u r truly lucky. :)

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  45. "To be close to those perfect lips...
    To feel the velvet of your skin...
    To sing a song into your ear,
    And light up the evening a bit." lovely imagery:) n pleased to see Chintan's photograph:) beautiful dedication:))

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  46. Lovely lines.Sounds Sweet!.Delish poem Dear!.Luv it!

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  47. Sensuous and beautiful!
    That line "If only, you permit..." -- totally LOVED it! It was super effective!

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  48. Or else, you may allow
    My fingers to tuck them in.
    To be close to those perfect lips...
    To feel the velvet of your skin...
    To sing a song into your ear,
    And light up the evening a bit.
    Then, let the body do the talking
    If only, you permit.

    BEAUTIFUL LINES...Sensuous and amazingly penned

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  49. I am falling short of adjectives for this one.
    Awesome work as always. :)

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  50. YOU ARE DOMINATING THE INDIVINE POETRY BLOCK! and your position is unquestionable and well-cemented after this post!

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  51. Beautiful poetry for the pretty picture.

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  52. wonderful crafted poem... loved it :)

    Weakest LINK

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  53. NOW you just make me say WOW...and HOW!!!!:-D

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  54. You never cease to surprise me with your blogging and poetry skills whenever I come here. Great work! Lucky Chintan there..;)

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  55. What a beautiful woman in picture,......
    Arey ise kahin toh dekha hai....
    O yeh to apni Chintan hai :)...
    That was my reaction ...hahaha
    Sorry Saru, I read your lines bit late this time :P...

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  56. wow ....so sensual loved ur poetry as always :)

    do visit my blog post :
    http://campbuzzz.blogspot.com/2012/01/youngistan.html

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  57. beautiful photo and lines... with extended eee and uuuu :)

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  58. Your poem is so breathtakingly beautiful - simple sensual sensuous sensational superb shining soul stirring spellbinding ! Shabash Saru !

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  59. I dont have any words in my vocabulary to explain how awesome this is. Great Going Saru :-)

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  60. Not connected to this post, but just a line to thank you for helping me (through your poetry posts) find courage to put out my poems to a larger readership.

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  61. wow!! each word of yours dwells so nicely into the soul..

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  62. Soulful! I love this Saru! As always you got me in here! Very romantic, the romance is moving like a wind in the atmosphere! And congrats again for the 2nd editor's choice award :)

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  63. Brilliant lines Saru.. Very well written. Chintan you have the charm in you as ever.

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  64. yaa, a beautiful tribute by you to Goddess.....:))

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  65. Wow..Saru! Just breathtakingly romantic:)))

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  66. @Nasnin Nasser- Thanks Nasnin for your ever beautiful words:)

    @Chintan Gupta- I told you how nervous I was...Thank God and you that you liked it...And, do you think I can say no to your offer. Just have to think about Saurabh and Alok:)

    @SuKupedia ™ :) :)- Pata nahin Suku, google se le hai;)

    @Sujatha Sathya- Seriously, men should write poems for us. And it was very difficult to write it...First, Chintan is hard to impress and Second, simple poems are tougher...

    @BlogAdmin- Thanks :)

    @Pooja Sridhar- Pooja, yaar aisa nahin hai...Chintan ke wajah se mein famous ho gaye hoon...Poem suit kar rahe hai na, Chintan ko?

    @Nimesh- Never, it's a golden opportunity that I will never miss...Thanks for liking it!

    @India's no.1 blog- We are lucky too, remember we have a lovely poem on our friendship...And, thanks...Your comments are a constant source of encouragement...

    @Akshay Kumar G- Thank you Akshay:)

    @केवल राम :- Thank You!

    @Prashanth- Thank you so much!

    @Red Handed- Actually, I love this picture so much that I wrote lines for it...:)

    @Rohit Sareen- Thank you Rohit:) :) :)

    @r_Phoenix- Thank you.

    @ladyfi- Thanks a lot!

    @Bikramjit Singh Mann- You should Bikram :) And, thank you!

    @Vertu- Thanks!!!

    @Megha Sarin- :):):)

    @Andy- Thanks a ton Andy:)

    @swati- Thanks a lot dear...

    @Rahul Bhatia- Thank you Sir...

    @Mohd Ehtesham- Thank you Ehte...

    @Kunal- Even I think it's good...Since the muse was totally rocking, the outcome should be great...:) Thanks for your comment, Kunal...

    @Sagittarian- Thank you!

    @Neha- :)

    @Raj- Thank you Raj:)

    @rahul aggarwal- Yeah, double wow for Chintan...Thank you Rahul:)

    @Angel- Thanks Angel!

    @Binu Thomas- Thanks!!!

    @Krishna- Thanks...

    @Jenny- Thank you Jenny:)

    @Being_AC- Thanks you Sir for your kind words:)

    @Madhusha- Thanks!

    @sharmila- Thank you but I like the muse more...She is a beautiful and lovely person...:)

    @Jasper- Thanks a ton dear:)

    @Thousif Raza- Thanks Thousif...:)

    @Rohit Singh- Thanks Rohit for such a lovely comment. Believe me, my vocabulary is very limited...

    @Dreaming Wanderer- Thank you dear and welcome here:)

    @Mithlash- Thank you:) :) :)

    @Sunil Padiyar- Thank you for your support, Sunil...Your comments lift my spirits...:)

    @Jidhu Jose- Thanks!

    @Spiderdama- Me too, she is looking like a French Diva...:)

    @Blasphemous Aesthete- She has accepted it...:) Thanks for liking it Anshul:)

    @Harsha- Thank you Harsha...:)

    @Indiana Amrita- Best compliment I received on this post. When I started writing this month and a half back, I wanted it to have that old word charm. Glad to know that you acknowledged it...

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  67. @Ketan Patil- Really...thrilled to know that:)

    @ANSHUL GAUTAM- Thank you...

    @Ana_treek- Thankfully, she is...And, thank you for liking it:)

    @alissa apel- Thanks!

    @My Journey With Candida- Nothing much dear, I just write few words here and there...:)

    @~*Princesa Fiona*~ - I knew you would like the last verse...Such a lovely relations we make on blogosphere that we know about each others tastes as well...:)

    @Anand- Thank you Anand...But seriously, pick a line...

    @சேகர்- Thanks Sekar:)

    @Mi- Thank you so much Mi...:) XOXOXO

    @☆ Rià ღ - Thanks!!!

    @Team G Square- Thanks!

    @TD23- Thank you dear...:)

    @Christy Gerald- Thanks Christy!

    @magiceye- Thank you Sir.

    @Kavita- Thank you Kavita...:)

    @Burhan- Thanks!

    @NUKTAA- Thank you so much dear and welcome here!

    @Ruchi Jain- Thanks!

    @vinay- Thanks a lot Vinay:)

    @AdiSin- Is it so? Thank you for your encouraging comment dear...I will check Indiblogger to have a good feel...:)

    @Kusum- Thanks Kusum...

    @Rachit- Thanks Rachit...Chintan is a perfect muse and all credit goes to her...:)

    @Rahul- Perfect play of words, Rahul...:) Cool comment:) :) :) It's nothing, write few words and make it rhyme...:) Done!!!

    @Farila- Thanks a ton Farila:)

    @deepbaazigar- I am happy to know that someone has great taste like I have...She looks stunning in this shot!

    @saikat mbka ghosh- Thanks :)

    @kedar- Thank you, with an extended uuuuu:)

    @R.Ramakrishnan- This is such a sweet comment...Thanks!

    @KParthasarathi- Thanks and welcome here:)

    @Ashwini- Thanks Ash:) :) :)

    @Subhorup Dasgupta- Glad to know that...Wish you larger and larger readership...:)

    @vinisha- Thanks!!!

    @swati- Thanks Swati!

    @♫♪♥PhilO♥♪♫- Thank you:)

    @Prime Aque- Thanks dear:)

    @ಅಶ್ವಿನಿ/ Ashwini- Chintan is charm personified...:) Thanks for the comment:)

    @Irfanuddin- Thanks!

    @avanti singh- Thanks:)

    @seema- Thanks Seema:)

    @Cloud Nine- Thanks a ton:)

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  68. Beautiful. The words, the essence, the music. And of course, the beauty. :)

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  69. To feel the velvet of your skin
    beautiful poem

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  70. Lovely poem. Aphrodite suits it perfectly. :)

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  71. There is simplicity in the making of this poem and authenticity in the beauty of Aphrodite . Nice work!!!

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  72. The lines are as beautiful as the beauty you speak of with such delicacy and tenderness that is also so sensuous:-)

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  73. I'm kind of a tubelight when it comes to understanding poems (knowing what the poet really means). But I can always identify a great line. "Till the spring blows a whistle" - fantastic.

    You deserve the huge number of comments you have got here, so I wanted to add on to it.

    Unfortunately I don't know Hindi, so I'm skipping your latest one, sorry about that.

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  74. Lovely Saru! Profound and short.
    I'm wondering what was circling your thoughts when you were writing this! :)

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  75. Awesome love poem! "Don't you tuck,
    Fallen hair behind.." Heart touching!

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  76. @Jill of all Trades- Thanks a lot:)

    @Deboshree- Thank you so much...

    @Kitty- Thanks Kitty!

    @sm- Thanks:)

    @Rupertt Wind- Thank you!

    @Ramakant Pradhan- Thanks a lot!

    @akriti91- Thanks a lot for your comment:)

    @ANULAL- :) :) :)

    @sriramnivas- Thanks for your lovely comment:)

    @joshi daniel- Thanks:)

    @Suruchi- Thanks a lot Suruchi...:)

    @Joshi Mukard- We are all tubelights out of our own field. But you have a great eye for anything. Be it photos or words. Great pick from the poem and thanks for your comment :)

    @Rachit- I love Chintan's photo and I saw it atleast 500 times before writing this poem. So, all credit goes to the shot...:)

    @Abhyudaya Shrivastava- Thanks a lot!

    @Mr. Jovita- Thanks!!!

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  77. I'm reading it again. Love love this!

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