badge

Recent Articles

Wednesday, November 16, 2011

Love Compartment


Two casual friends at a train station,
Bidding goodbye to their kids working far away.
Girl's father was worried for her,
So he asked boy to accompany her all the way.
Boy hated it as he felt bounded,
He had to be agile.
He could have slept or smoked,
Now his journey was to protect a fragile.
Girl didn't like it either,
She could have managed on her own.
Boy was unnecessary trouble,
Her wish of quite journey was gone.
Both were thinking it's for once,
They had to bear this pain.
But every trip for next three years,
They met again and again.
It became a vacation ritual,
Which neither of them liked.
Falling like pieces of a puzzle,
Life was then a confusing ride.
They don't know when 'love' happened,
Can't even recall going down the memory lane.
Not in a coffee shop, not in a park,
They met in a train.

* Based on a true story. Thanks to Rekha Gangadharan for sharing her parents' story with us.
Appeal for Irfan 
Image source - www.google.com

Pin It Now!

100 comments:

  1. Such a sweet story. And beautifully written as usual. :)

    ReplyDelete
  2. Saru, so good to see you back with yet another lyrical love tale!It makes it even more passionate being a true life incident..

    ReplyDelete
  3. It's crazy how we hate something that we grow so fond of. It was that way with my husband and I. He was head over heals for me. I just thought he was annoying. Then I opened myself to be friends with him. Then it was I that was begging for him to go out with me.

    ReplyDelete
  4. Awesome love story Saru :) And very well written :)

    Bloggers Park

    ReplyDelete
  5. finally there is a real train romance story :)

    ReplyDelete
  6. that was so sweet and beautiful... and cool.. and cute... ok i am gonna get all mushy... :P

    it was very nice :)

    <3'd it

    Take care and keep writing...........

    ReplyDelete
  7. Such a sweet story and even more heartwarming knowing that it was inspired from a real life situation! :)

    ReplyDelete
  8. How sweet! Beautiful love story:-)

    ReplyDelete
  9. Awesome story with a good message.

    ReplyDelete
  10. When a touch of reality is added to the beautiful words...it takes the creation to dizzying heights....and that is where this simple and touching poem belongs!

    ReplyDelete
  11. All is well that ends in love... ;) lovely poem

    ReplyDelete
  12. Saru, very eloquently written,
    taken away words to comment:)

    Well-done!

    ReplyDelete
  13. அருமையான பதிவு மட்டுமல்லாது, உரைநடையும் அழகு.

    ReplyDelete
  14. Loved the love in the love poem :P!!!

    ReplyDelete
  15. wow reallyy.. how nice.. hmmmm ..i thought *happy endings* were rumours :P... beautiful poem Saru, i lov ethe way you write..

    ReplyDelete
  16. awwwww this is so cute ^_^ I simply adore it <3

    ReplyDelete
  17. How exquisitely you weave stories in this minimal way. It's crispy and cute! Enjoyed it dear:) Regards:)

    ReplyDelete
  18. Very cute story. Beautiful as always :)

    ReplyDelete
  19. The story is nice but the juxtaposition of "kids" and "working" sounds strange - obviously they are kids only for their parents :)

    ReplyDelete
  20. Beautiful, Saru :) You made an inspiring life-story thoroughly memorable!

    ReplyDelete
  21. It sounds like Suku's story too, a little though :) The train bit....Write for Suku too, no? :D

    And many congratulations for settling the house <3

    Please link this post on your blog Saru, or if you can please copy the text and link it to Irfan's blog?
    Appeal for Irfan

    ReplyDelete
  22. 'Love emerges like a lightening and cools your heart like the summer rain; No matter even if it happens in the middle of the Sahara desert or a train journey or a ship journey, that's the way love grows and mesmerizes. Nice poem and I'm really feeling happy for this romantic train couple!!!
    From: www.sriramnivas.com

    ReplyDelete
  23. Beautiful story woven into a poem.....u have a gr88 talent of playing with words :)

    ReplyDelete
  24. love is strange na. . . liked it. . . :)

    ReplyDelete
  25. as usual.....I just have to dial 'saru' for awesomenes...:-)

    ReplyDelete
  26. Absolutely brilliant... Both joy and tears for you!

    ReplyDelete
  27. brilliant...and the fact that u wrote it based on a true story, makes it even better...!

    ReplyDelete
  28. Great one yaar...life is so full of serendipity...or so it seems :) but actually whats meant to be...will only be :)

    ReplyDelete
  29. Thats really a sweet one and very honest writing......! :)

    ReplyDelete
  30. For they were destined to be together :)
    A beautiful cute story! :)

    Love, ~Moonlight~ :)

    ReplyDelete
  31. Jab they met in train! Love happens... nicely written

    ReplyDelete
  32. the inspiration behind your lovely poem is equally lovely :)

    ReplyDelete
  33. A cute little poetic love story! Brilliantly written :)

    ReplyDelete
  34. Really wonderful post.Thanks for sharing such nice story

    ReplyDelete
  35. How Nice. sounds so wonderful :-)

    ReplyDelete
  36. Aw! A feel good story Saru :) Penned beautifully. :)

    ReplyDelete
  37. i was just gona scream BOLLYWOOD! Wen i read the last line.. true story??? how cute!!:D

    ReplyDelete
  38. i thought its story of hindi movie and in last you gave ZOR KA zatka its true story.
    thats great
    it happens.

    ReplyDelete
  39. All you need is love, as the beatles sang :)
    Very well written, loved it :D


    If you had a few minutes, could you read a post of mine? And if you like it, give it a vote? I'd be most most grateful :)
    Every vote means a lot, and makes a big difference :)

    http://www.indiblogger.in/indipost.php?post=90039

    ReplyDelete
  40. Every true love story is different and this adds to the list! Nice.

    ReplyDelete
  41. Any love story that's true, is a bliss :)

    ReplyDelete
  42. wow!

    thats so lovely and so very well written :)

    ReplyDelete
  43. Beautiful ... Very well jotted down :-)

    ReplyDelete
  44. Lovely! Something of this sort actually happened to my friend :) I will def. show this to her.

    ReplyDelete
  45. This is so well expressed Saru. You are a great writer. We all know about such stories, but for them to make an impression and stay in our mind...that is what you do as a poet. Thanks!

    ReplyDelete
  46. Hello.
    This is such a lovely story.
    The power & magic of love...it has a way of creeping up on you when you least expect it.
    Well done!
    Thanks for sharing & visiting. I appreciate the comment.

    I'm having a party at my blog. If you'd like to attend, click here for details.

    Thoughts Of Beauty In The Stillness Of Dawn

    ReplyDelete
  47. What a great story! And so well written.

    ReplyDelete
  48. Hi there,
    What a lovely poem. Takes us through the train ride! And how exciting that it is inspired by a true story. Long live Romance!

    Beautiful Writing!
    Seena

    ReplyDelete
  49. It makes me wonder - most often people who hate each other at the begining fall in love at the end... cute story expressed in beautiful 'words' :) as always... ..

    ReplyDelete
  50. nice one saru.

    we never know really when it happens

    love comes like a full moon
    love comes like a mansoon

    www.readitt.in - the e magazine -

    ReplyDelete
  51. Wow..what a love story..reminded me of "Jab we met" ..often love happens so different from how it is portrayed in movies...

    ReplyDelete
  52. very fast paced...loved it!!!

    regards
    rahul

    ReplyDelete
  53. wow this lovely train-love train was so good..
    it was like a melody

    Lovely write up saru !!

    Beauteous :)

    ReplyDelete
  54. Very nice. Perfectly portrayed emotions.

    ReplyDelete
  55. whatte lovely way of expressing a real life incident... liked it very much :)

    ReplyDelete
  56. What a way to narrate a story .
    I am impressed : )

    ReplyDelete
  57. Hi Saru,An Inspirational Blog award is waiting for U at my space. Come and grab it Dear.

    ReplyDelete
  58. Hi Saru,An Inspirational Blog award is waiting for U at my space. Come and grab it Dear.

    ReplyDelete
  59. Love has so many definitions, layers, emotions and relationships. Beautifully conveyed :)

    ReplyDelete
  60. very sweet poem Saru:) and the title is awsome:)

    ReplyDelete
  61. After a long time read something directly from the heart.

    ReplyDelete
  62. really for the very first time, i enjoyed myself reading someone's blog !

    ReplyDelete
  63. really cute saru, could easily be the back script of a bolly movie :P

    ReplyDelete
  64. nice piece of art ...loved it matched the structure of the poem with simplicity of truth of life.:)

    ReplyDelete
  65. @Everyone- Thanks for your wonderful comments...

    ReplyDelete
  66. The stories itself is so poetic and your words have put more life to it.
    I have seen most of the successful love stories start on such notes.
    Story in pieces

    ReplyDelete
  67. Could make out it was a slice from reality.

    Nice.

    keep it goin;)

    ReplyDelete
  68. wow that's really lovely............. :)a unique love story....
    saikatmbka(campbuzzz.blogspot.com)

    ReplyDelete
  69. cute.....do you know why i read your posts, it just relaxes me...so simply written, with such a soft flow...

    ReplyDelete
  70. This is such a common scenario. But soemthing like this turning into a togetherness for life is awesome! :)
    very beautifully put!! Loved it!! :)

    ReplyDelete
  71. It reminded me of another love story which started with train journey.. very soulful.. as always loved the way you described this love story in simple words :-) Keep writing Saru...

    ReplyDelete
  72. Thought such things happen on the 70mm screen :) nice!

    ReplyDelete
  73. I am glad you revived the ballad.

    ReplyDelete
  74. @Everyone- Thanks for your comments and feedback!

    ReplyDelete
  75. Wow!So cute ! I always fantasized meeting "the one" on a train! :D lol!

    ReplyDelete
  76. Really a beautiful story.I like the flow of words.Very Well written

    ReplyDelete
  77. nice and off-beat..
    did remind me of an age-old English classic where the whole movie shows a man and a woman getting to see each other at a station only.. nothing much in d story, but those times.. this was a classic.. couldn't remember the name though.. your poem is perfectly apt as d title.. although pardon me if I felt that it did lack the retro feel a little bit..

    ReplyDelete
  78. sweet post! loved the rhythm part most :)

    ReplyDelete
  79. Saru, You are worth a read everyday and i do find you everyday only to explore some more writer in you. Amazing an amalgamation of poetry with a story narrative.

    ReplyDelete

This blog breathes on your comments!

Related Posts Plugin for WordPress, Blogger...